feel, soul, and my life

FIRST IMPRESSION

To be honest, when you sent that short description of your roleplay to my ask, I wasn't particularly very interested. A lot of people have attempted making similar roleplays and they are not exactly my style. That being said, I am not going to let my personal preference get in the way of your review.

I think that this should be easy to attract people seeing that they really enjoy reality TV show type of roleplays. Your icon is alright for me (I think it's the standard icons used for roleplays, nowadays; no problem here) and I think that your url is quite generic (as in, a lot of people use similar urls implying all about being wild and free). I know it's a roleplay as it has the word rpg on it.

THEMES AND GRAPHICS

I think your theme is very good, very clean and I can see everything clearly. The font's clear; the size is good and readable. For that, I give you two thumbs up. The color scheme is very nice to look at. I love turquoise/teal as it is a soothing color; since your roleplay is set in a tropical island, it compliments the theme and the overall tone of the roleplay.

The graphics you have are excellent for me. They're very flashy (in a good way) and I think that it has a lot of work being put into it. You can tell. I think it's very good, no complaints from me.

I can navigate through your blog easily, which is good. Your navigation page is not very crowded. No links are dead, I suggest for you to keep this up. Also, I see that the follow list you are using is a blogroll. I would suggest changing it to a page containing the links so the names of the character would be visible through it, like a normal or standard master list. It's just a small peeve of mine, but if you think the blogroll is a much better alternative for a follow list, then it's fine. Or maybe you can keep both!

PLOT

As I mention before, your plot is very common, but that doesn't mean that you can't run a great roleplay.

Your sidebar plot is eye catching for me and I love the way it is written. I enjoy reading the sidebar plot, really. It already tell the full plot of the roleplay, though, so I wasn't very driven/eager to read the full plot. Maybe leave a cliffhanger at the end of the sidebar plot to draw people to read the full plot?

I think that your full plot is simple and easy to read. I can easily draw the point that this a roleplay group where teenagers live in an island and they are doing this reality show. It's really understandable since you focus on the whole idea that the roleplay is about a reality TV show. It's just the full version of the story you described on the sidebar. That's very well-done.

However, as the roleplay progresses, please add more twists and turns with the plot. The plot is quite generic and hopefully, there could be some spark in your plot that could drag the people into applying and stay around. There should be something special in your plot seeing that many roleplays has the same one.

CHARACTERS

I think your bios are short and to the point. I see no problem with it, but I guess a little more elaboration about the character's personality wouldn't hurt (e.g. those five words to describe a character). It's not compulsory, seeing that I can grasp the character's main personality from reading the bios.

I would love it if you would add more people of color in the roleplay, because it can add more diversity and that could attract more people who are interested in playing them. It can also encourage more members. Also, I would like to see more variety of personalities. Please equalize the amount of goody-two-shoes, party-animals, class-clown, and other types of characters. Balance them so it will be an interesting group of people. I can understand that you haven't posted all of the bio, but please keep the things I have pointed out in mind. So far, the majority of the people you have posted leans more to the bad/dark side.

RULES AND APPLICATION

I think the rules are very easy to follow, but rewording the rules wouldn't hurt. I'm going to tell you that there is a misspelling of hiatus in your rules (you spelled it as hatius). I would advice re-reading the whole rules and check for spelling mistakes, grammatical mistakes, and read it aloud to see whether it sounded nice, polite and professional.

For example, instead of saying: 'No OOC drama. No bullying. No being mean. No being rude. If I see it, I will kick you out. No questions asked.' you can say: 'No OOC drama. No bullying. No being mean or rude. If I see it, you will be asked to leave the roleplay. No questions asked.'

It sounds much more polite and friendlier. Also, I am having a problem understanding the code/password of your app. Are you asking for the phrase to be put into the app or do you want the applicants to give an answer? Just make sure it doesn't get mixed up (although it is more likely my fault rather than yours).

I think the IC rules are also a nice touch, maybe putting them in a separate page wouldn't hurt, though. It's only a small problem for me.

Your application is the standard one and I really like the fact that you ask why the player wants the character. I have no problem with the application.

ADMINS

I think the admins are nice, friendly, and quite professional. I do have a problem with those posts regarding 'come and apply'. I would suggest you making a promo blog so it wouldn't crowd your main page. There are quite a lot of them and I would suggest keeping the front page clean for any announcements and bios.

I would love to scroll through the blog and easily read announcements, new bios, accepted apps, answered questions, etc. I'm really sorry if that offended you in anyway. Those 'please leave apps for us' posts can easily be replaced by promo pictures and ads in your promo blog; plus by using a promo blog, it's an easier way to advertise and to keep your blog clean.

Also, please make sure that if a question has no relations to the roleplay group, do not post it. It's just a piece of advice, I saw that question from looking-for-admin and thought it would be better if you would answer it privately. I'm also not a big fan of character giveaways. Next time, please refrain yourself from doing those.

OVERALL

All I want to mention is that the roleplay seems nice, but I would like to remind you that apart from the constant 'please apply' post, the roleplay looks good either way. Please take into account all of the things I have pointed out. The main thing I would like you to do is to keep all of the advertisements to the promo blog for a cleaner front page.

Your plot is good to get your roleplay going and I hope that you would add more diversity to the characters that you have in terms of personality and race. It will make your roleplay much more interesting. You will also need some sort of twists, events, and prompts to set yourself apart from other roleplays in the likes of yours. But do not worry, a lot of roleplayers enjoy reality-show type plots, so with the right amount of advertisement, you will have many members! Just remember to set your group apart from other groups by catering the members with adding more suitable and needed drama.

Good luck!

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