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This week we are reviewing,

League Of Assassins- leagueofassassinsff

Author’s Description: Welcome to The League. The worldly organization for the best of the best assassins. In a world were money and power reign supreme, stands the Madisons. The smallest more influential family within the League. Meet young Bridget, the youngest child and the gate keeper of records. Orphaned at two, she finds love and acceptance within the family. She never had a question about her past nor family. They were all she knew and loved. Until the day the past blows into town, she always thought she knew all the secrets. But she didn’t count on the ones not written on paper. Bridget finally learns the truth; about her past, her real parents. And herself. Will the love for the Madisons change or be forever tainted? What does family really mean? Welcome to the League of Assassins. are you the next assignment? An original Jurnee Smollett-Bell fanfic, featuring Daniel ‘Booby’ Gibson.

    411:  Accompanied by a thrilling storyline from the start LOA is jam packed with formfitting character dialogue. While the author adds a lot of detail the first person narrative gives a play-by-play narration that makes the detail seem overwhelming at times. With a large cast it is easy to get lost between characters— and this writer is on the verge of falling victim to that. However if you can keep up with who is who you will find yourself caught up in a whirlwind of assassins and family life. This story is in the beginning stages and due to its great storyline it has huge potential to improve as the chapters go along.

  Pros: few grammatical errors/original ideas

Cons: too large of a cast/story flow (sequence/structure)

Rating: 3/5

  THIS STORY IS IN PROGRESS: chapters

Seems like this week revolves around assassins! Our second review, 

Full Moon- fullmoon-fiction

Authors Description: [Synopsis]—Savannah finds herself trapped in the addiction of overpowering the man (her victims). The frantic screams of horror, their eyes bulging, praying to a god for their life sends a rush of excitement to her after each kill. By day she’s known as Savannah Whitaker, a student attending a small college majoring in Health Education. When night falls her act of a simple shy girl disappears and she becomes known as her alter-ego, Honey V.She won’t stop her spree of killing until the target she craves for is down. She’ll give up this cruel lifestyle and turn over a new leaf once she knows for sure with bloody evidence that the bastard who murdered her mother is dead. 

411: This is a ravishing tale of a woman working to avenge the death of her mother. The authors pulls you in deeper and deeper to understand Savannah's world. With wonderfully crafted chapters this story resembles the movie Columbiana, BUT with its own twist. Having only three chapters the author manages to captivate readers and send them on a ride shotgun with miss savannah herself. 

Pros: well-written/few to no grammatical errors

Cons: N/A

Rating: 5/5

THIS STORY IS IN PROGRESS: chapters

This week we are reviewing two stories. First up, 

Hell On Earth- hellonearthff

Author’s Description: In the eyes of the world he was an idol. To her he was the devil himself. He loved her. Craved her. His soul yearned for her. She hated him. Despised him. But amongst all the hate did she love him?

411: Hell on Earth is a well-written love story loaded with great narratives, realistic details and an attention grasping storyline that will have you continuously reading from one chapter to the next. Through HOE the author depicts just how powerful love can be. With interactive character conversations readers were able to feel like apart of the story. Read along to follow the story of an angered man and the love of his life.

Pros: well-written/ few to no grammatical errors/ realistic

Cons: N/A

THIS STORY IS COMPLETED :   chapters  trailer 1 trailer 2

Rating: 5/5

Second review,

An Intimate Coincidence- anintimatecoincidenceff

Author’s Description: You should know there’s no such thing as coincidences, only incidents with a twist.
-Anonymous

 Another great Chrianna love story.

411: An Intimate Coincidence is a story about a man who seeks out a woman and makes her fall in love, only for her to discover everything does not happen coincidently. With many plot twist and shocking revelations the author keeps the readers guessing and on their toes. This story keeps you wondering “who did it” and “what happens next?” This author also provides alternative scenarios in the form of shorts that are not meant to take place in the actual story— she simply gives the readers what they want without diverting from her original path. Don’t let the fact that it is a chrianna story deter you from reading. Even though they are the selected main characters of choice they do not resemble chrianna in real life, in other words give this story a chance and you won’t regret it.  

Pros: engaging/ well-written/ few to no grammatical errors

Cons: sporadic updates

THIS STORY IS IN PROGRESS: chapters 

Rating: 5/5

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