a Writer's Confession

"Whatever makes you think I can trust you, traitor?"

"I was only ever thinking of you"

"I did this. For you!"

"Would you just read the map?"

"Robin can't have gotten far, what's the worst that could have happened?"

"Once you name it, you start getting attached to it. Put that thing back where it came from, or so help me!"

"The rain started when Mom died."

"Put the blade down."

"It's either me or the dog. You choose"

"Why can't you just listen to me?"

"I didn't want to do this."

“Darling, your effort is commendable. Really. But you should stop before you get hurt.”

“Do you want to play a little game?”

“You should accept the loss humbly while I still allow it.”

“Bloodlust was never a good look on you.”

“I want them to see you how I see you, because they have no idea what you’re really capable of. Do they?”

“Well, aren’t you the little trickster, pet.”

“I hope you die in a fire.”

“That looks like it hurts.”

“Come now Hero, such things aren’t in your nature.”

“Play with me.”

“You’re more like me than you realise. How long do you think it’ll be before they see it too?”

“I don’t want to kill you but get in my way again and I just might have to.”

“How unheroic of you.”

“You look good in my colours.”

“I’m almost tempted to let you live.”

“What’s a little torture between friends?”

Do you ever find yourself over-using the word “cry” (or “cried” or “crying”) in your writing? Try using these words instead:

sob / sobbed / sobbing

wail / wailed / wailing

weep / wept / weeping

bawl / bawled / bawling

whimper / whimpered / whimpering

howl / howled / howling

blubber / blubbered / blubbering

snivel / sniveled / sniveling

squall / squalled / squalling

yelp / yelped / yelping

whine / whined / whining

shed tears / shed tears / shedding tears

burst into tears / burst into tears / bursting into tears

tear up / teared up / tearing up

choke up / choked up / choking up

well up / welled up / welling up

break down / broke down / breaking down

let it out / let it out / letting it out

turn on the waterworks / turned on the waterworks / turning on the waterworks

What she doesnt realise, is something is definitely wrong....

But what?