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Feedback from Rafik

I have started to layout my final presentation, which will be printed on a large 740mm wide by 1800mm tall page. I printed onto A4 pages at full size to get an idea of the scale of my images and check the resolution. Rafik critiqued my storyboard images and layout design and gave me some good ideas and some things to think about.

Layout needs a section drawing: could put that along the bottom

If I show day and night images I could go top to bottom or vice versa, don’t just replicate the same day image at night

The main image is too busy. The background could be faded and show less people so my design is more prominent

The images should all have a photographic background so people can more easily identify the location

The plan needs to show North and have street labels

The dad on his phone creates a new topic of conversation that I’d rather leave out. The point isn’t about how families interact, it is about children feeling included in the city space

Clearly explain the problem/social issue and the aim of the project

Define inclusiveness and explain how we can feel included

Explain the key words for the design: movement, nature (or education?), joy and safety and how it relates to inclusiveness

Shell inspiration: David Trubridge shell lightshades

Storyboard: 5 images

I have been working on the style of my presentation images. I like the montage image I made back in week 1 of the site sequence and I had good feedback about it from others so I’m going to use that as my inspiration. Using photos from the site as the background and my children showing movement and play to explore my designs in the site.

My storyboard images are of my mini sites down the lane. The main image is a perspective through the lane showing several of my design installations with kids playing in the space. The other four images are close ups of each mini site design: the entrance wave boardwalk, shell sculptures, tree stumps and driftwood swings.

3d Model: Wave Ramp

3d Model: Rainbow Poles

3d Model: Shells

3d Model: Enter the site

3d Model: Overview

Collage of Concepts

This is an interesting overview of my journey through this project. I started with some basic notions of what I wanted to achieve, and through research and experimenting I have formed a well thought out idea that has meaning to the site and socially sustainable principles.

The current concept is twofold – on the ground and from above. On the ground I want to emphasis the pull of nature; both of the beach having been reclaimed and also the nature of spontaneous play. Above is a cinematic idea of watching a live performance of movement below. These two parts are significant to the site.