#trouble clef

Chp 1 Pt. 2

<< The Deal >>

My main objection is that it’s resolved through a guy coercing a woman into marriage (and presumably a sexual relationship) via pixie magic.

My secondary problems with it revolve around it being a weird b plot that I didn’t feel really added anything. The downlanders come back for final confrontation but… they’re hardly clutch in the battle, so it feels like it’s just there for padding. Also, how come a dead(?) god was living above them and they never cared much about it?

Plus, at least in the dub I last watched, the jokes are very much “wife bad, sex please” and making mother-in-law punchlines. Which is a sense of humour I despise.

Generally I try to keep a consistent, more grounded tone with my rewrite (you be the judge as to if I manage that!) but I couldn’t wrap my head around a way to apply that to Downland without me wanting to yeet my laptop into the sun and never write again.

I always joke that Kaede found what she assumed was an abandoned bunny in Middle School and took it home, Was Clef's origin Story (in 'canon').

Ch 1 Pt 1 - A Deal

Next ( coming soon )

A little warm up sketch while I work on Part 2

This will all be explored more thoroughly in future chapters, but as for now, I am currently starting the long process of Part 2 of Chapter 1..