Tonight, I left off with this paragraph on my WIP... It’s part of the first draft of the 3rd chapter. I’m posting this because I want to come back and see how this particular passage changes later. I know I weave in and out of past and present tense and some sentences definitely need rewriting. What I love the most though is how in love I am with the direction of the scene and this entire story.
For context, she’s using nicknames (Sunshine & Night) because she doesn’t know their names yet.
“She gives them doe eyes in an attempt to throw them off. she knows there is only one reason why she’s here. She hacked something she shouldn’t have and this is revenge. It was clear that Sunshine wasn’t expecting her to be a woman though and it has definitely made some complications for his gloomy friend. At least that was her bet.
Sunshine reaches for her face and it makes her jump before she realizes he’s reaching for the mouth guard that was there to keep her from biting her tongue. She sighs at the comfort of having the intrusive object removed and generously gulps down the bottle of water he hands her. She can’t help but wonder how many times he’s done this before. As she slowly lowered the bottle she looked at his hands and wondered if they were stained with blood she couldn’t see. If hers would touch them next. Or was that Night's job?“
-Project Dark
Remember, no one writes a perfect first draft. The most important thing you can do is get the story out. You can always fix it later.
