#thechallengersrpg

Find the quick review here!

URL

Same as before - the URL is short, memorable and works fairly well in getting across the group genre. It’s not overly complicated either.

Theme

I still love the colour scheme you have going on, the bright primary colours and black and white make the page look very appealing and match the comic theme well. I like the theme with the smaller header much more as it doesn’t draw the eye as much as it used to, so you’re more likely to look at the actual page content.

Plot

Again, the sidebar plot is really well written and walks the line between teasing and giving information very well - it makes me want to read on to the main plot to find out what happens to the citizens of the town. I also still think the first section of the plot is a tad long and goes overboard with setting up a mysterious tone. It could probably be cut down to one paragraph if you got rid of some superfluous sentences. Overall though, the plot does a great job at setting the scene and the possibilities to come, and it’s well-paced other than the first paragraph.

Characters

I’m so glad you’ve got some characters out this time! The bios are all of similar length which is great to see as it makes sure none are more important than others. I like the touch of adding the inspo/ask tags etc. to the bio itself for easy navigation. I do think the bios are a little on the long side, however - there’s a lot of information in there that might put off players who want to jiggle around with backgrounds etc. But then again, I’m not sure what you could take out. The power section in particular is great in that you set out the basic levels of the power to ensure your method of introducing them gradually works out. Although you have great gender and ethnic diversity in FCs, I’d love to see some more diversity in body type and ability.

Rules

As I mentioned in my first review, I think it’d be useful to add a link to your triggers page in the rules for ease of navigation. You really reiterate in the rules that any kind of hate won’t be tolerated and that the group is a safe space for all, which shows how serious you’re going to be about it. The rules cover all the bases in easy to understand terms and I can’t think of anything else you’d need to add, so well done!

Application

I love that you’ve left the option open that people can just say if they’re under or over eighteen, it really shows an acceptance to people who might not want to share that information. I do find it a little odd that you insist on FCs coming off the bio suggestions - if you want to enforce an FC for each character I think it’s best you only have one on the bio, with exceptions for talking to the admins. It’d be useful if you added a suggested length to the para sample section, so people know what you’re looking for. There are lots of development questions, and I’m glad to see they’re short as longer development questions can put a lot of people off applying as the development is something they prefer to do when the group’s going.

Miscellaneous

I love love love the character graphics! The admin who made them has done a fantastic job, they fit is so well with the genre and look really attractive. The admins all seem very professional and friendly, and give excellent answers to asks. There are a few typos here and there in the bios, so I think you’d benefit from a proof-reader, either another admin or someone unrelated to the group.

Overall

URL and Theme

+ I really like the URL, it’s short and memorable and still gives you an idea of the group genre. The colour scheme works great, and I love the graphics for the admin signatures. It puts across the comic theme excellently.

- The header image puts me off a little, mostly because of the dark text over a dark image. It’s a little hard to read. The text size for the posts also hard to read as it’s quite small.

Plot and Characters

+ The sidebar plot is great, it definitely puts across a sense of intrigue and makes me want to go onto the full plot. The main plot does a great job at setting out the atmosphere of the night in question, and I like the way you’re going to be introducing the powers as the group itself goes on - it seems very original to me. It’s great to see you’re accepting of all types of character and FC.

- The plot is a little on the long side for me - I think the first section could be shortened to a sentence or so very easily. It’s a little odd to me that there’s no actual mention of the superpowers in the main plot (this may be on purpose, and if so I apologise!) so I think a link to your ‘powers’ page might be useful to add to the plot page.

Rules and Application

+ 5 days is an excellent activity limit for a para group, and you make the process for hiatuses very clear. Good to see you’ll have a trigger page.

- I think you could be more specific than ‘make sure you know the age of the writers’. Saying that there should be no underage smut is clearer!

Overall