#swt3

"Feedback"

Assignment

Write (and record if you’re a podcaster) a 2-minute piece (that’s about 200-250 words) about a fight between two people. Don’t work it too much. When you post it:

1. Ask for feedback

2. Set parameters for what feedback you want

3. Limit the feedback to an exact number of responses

4. Thank your responders once you’ve reached that number

Author's Note

So yes, if you happen to be reading this, you can provide feedback! I'd like to know:

What you think of the characters / What opinion you draw from them from this scene

Whether it was captivation to read or boring

Where you think this scene would be in a story – the beginning, the middle, or in the climax or conclusion area – and why

And finally do you think this is a realistic dialogue?

At the moment feedback is open. When I receive 5 different feedbacks then I will update the status in this post itself and that will be the end of the process. This is not a particularly active Tumblr page so that may be a while but it doesn't matter.

Thanks a billion. Here's my piece. Enjoy.

Solution

The Deal

"... Every time."

He turned around. "What?" He squeezed his fist closed and walked up to his thin roommate. Afraz towered over the young teen, but the boy was unfazed.

"I said, every time you're late it's because you were with that girl."

"Yeah? So?"

"So nothing," the boy said, shrugging. He held up his serpentine face and grinned his buckteeth at him. "Interesting tidbit. That's all."

Afraz remembered that this kid edited the college magazine. He scowled.

"Now, listen here you little wise guy. Whatever happens in my personal life is none of your business! You hear me? So keep your ugly mouth shut about it."

"Yeah? Why would I do that?"

Afraz flexed his arm. He hadn't yet achieved the big bulging muscles he needed to intimate the kid but his natural strength was good enough to imply medium to high levels of pain.

But the boy just rolled his eyes. "Don't give me that. I could give you a better idea than that! Hurting me will only make me want to write about you even more." He leaned forward. "How about you try handing out some favours to keep my mouth shut?"

Afraz barred his teeth.

"Come on! I'll make it easy. Promise."

"Fine! What do you want, kid?"

"My name's Benjamin. And I want you to introduce me to the girl you're hanging out with so much." Afraz frowned. "Not for anything wrong, trust me, I've seen her work. She's an ex-editor and writes plays and honestly I could use some help with my piece right now." He grinned. "So, deal?"

He sighed.