#spookychu

rich boy tears :>

pewter DEFINITELY deserved to be there

ig he’s not there because he’s not in the group dance in the ending (since he’s in prison), but hell, you have the models! the dance is the exact same! even kagami is dancing!!! it works even with weirder models like mama or mayumi!!! nothing prevented anyone from including the villains. even if pewter’s status as a villain is kinda... uncertain. i would have done the same for someone i love and he was manipulated and all that jazz.

I’m not very good with music and sharing sites in general, but I’d love to have some songs shared! Do any of my followers know a good site? Please let us know!

“Sorry,” Luna said, attempting to laugh it off as shescrubbed tears from her face. “I should have known. No matter how hard I try,I'm always… Completely useless.”

Dio knew he probably ought to say something. Something niceor comforting or whatever. Because she was freaking the fuck out and it wasn’ta big deal and he was pretty sure he’d seen that guy in 106 with the abusiveex-wife do the exact same thing once after spilling a can of cola on the hallcarpet. The thought made his guts twist enough to finally push words from hismouth.

“It’s just a cup.”

The tone was a little disbelieving, a little rude. Like him.And of course by the startled look on her face he’d probably totally put hisfucking foot in it. But at least Luna had stopped crying.

“W-what…?” she asked.

“It’s just a cup,” Dio repeated, shrugging. “I got like fivemore. We’ll toss it and that’ll be it.”

2: What scene did you first put down? this feeds into #9 but i actually wrote john and nick’s meeting first. the first time was disjointed from john’s pov and then the second time stuck with nick’s pov, and since nick was easier to write as i went ahead and just kept his pov throughout

3: What’s your favorite line of narration? ok it’s not like my FAVORITE b/c i’m sure there are other parts that i like equally as much, but after picking around my favorite chapters (winter nights, helping hands and unpaid manual labor) i think this is one of my better attempts at conveying action while not forgetting setting:

Nick hopes he never has to admit it again, but John is apparently right to warn him.  The dirt under the thick foliage is loose and wet from the earlier rains, which Nick only realizes as he sinks his boot right into the root system of the vines holding the erosion at bay. He pitches down the hill, managing to bring up his arm a fraction of a second too late to save himself from going headfirst into the ground. His elbow takes most of the damage, followed immediately by his temple, ringing his bell so thoroughly that he misses the rest of his full-on tumble down the slope. He's face-first in the dirt one second, and face-up to the canopy the next, the world still spinning even when Nick is pretty sure he's hit the bottom.   Somewhere nearby he can hear the river, and all around him are deep green leaves and bright pink flowers.  Sunlight shines in through the trees, and for a moment the amber light turns the world around him into an alien landscape.  The plants rustle in the breeze; somewhere on the incline above, he can hear roots tearing through the dirt.  They're miles away, on the contour just above him, and Nick struggles to focus on them.

honestly that whole chapter was pretty baller as far as narration goes, i think it’s the one i’m most satisfied with overall. thats not the question but thats an answer!

4: What’s your favorite line of dialogue? again with the favorites, let me just highlight the dialogue right before that part because it is PEAK john/nick

"What are you doing?" John asks incredulously as Nick starts to gently pick his way through the brush down the slope.  "That's a terrible idea." "Suddenly you know so much about everything," Nick grouses.

also peak john/nick from the party, because this is actually their relationship now

"What, you wanna go hide all night?" Nick rolls his eyes. "No, don't be a baby. Worst that'll happen is you'll get knocked down again." John doesn't look convinced, so Nick tries another route. "Come on, we went through all that just so you wouldn't have to hide out every time we have company. And people are gonna have to get used to you eventually — at least Sharky and Hurk already know you're alive." Finally, when none of that seems to work, he sighs and promises, "I'll make sure nobody decks you for no good reason, c'mon." John finally relents, sighing and gesturing vaguely. "Fine," he says, "Whatever you say.”

and just for good measure, here’s a decent bit of john and kim talking

John takes a breath. [...] "I'm sorry," he mutters. Stunned, Kim asks, "Are you okay?" "No," he quietly replies. "You were right." Kim shakes her head, glancing briefly at Nick before putting a gentle hand on John's arm. [...] "We can talk about it later, if you want," Kim tells him, patting his shoulder. There's relief in John's voice as he suggests, "I'll need a strong drink before I accept that offer." Kim shakes her head, laughing a little. "It's as good a place to start as any," she tells him.

actually i have some pretty good dialogue in a newer fic but i’ll wait to talk about that until its done, suffice it to say kim and john can actually communicate like adults sometimes

9: Were there any alternate versions of this fic? so yeah originally the fic was going to be from john’s perspective, and he and the ryes were going to communicate through the radio for a while before john’s died. it was gonna be a whole thing to make it more realistic for nick and kim to forgive john, but then as i worked on it i realized that actually, fuck that lol. i still have scraps from it left around in case i can use any of the lines later