#soft wheezing

soft whisper

Alex just.... squints.

@versusdelinquent

things to do:

go through add background characters

double check locations and environments

add in evidence

shift notes around, perhaps add flashback scenes 

go through Murder List™ double check all victims, murderers, locations, evidence, detectives, CSI’s and other random bit and bobs

REREAD THROUGH IT ALL to makes sure it works

“i swear i’ll do things different this time,”

atsuko stared up at the younger male, bottom lip tucked between her teeth. the boy before her resembled her brother so much, yet he wasn’t. she couldn’t help the feeling of worry that filled her stomach as she looked at how defeated the boy looked.

“chilli,” the elder sighed, reaching out and resting her hand on his shoulder, “it wasn’t your fault. the fire you control is like mine, yes, but it’s different. you don’t have to be the best right away. i’ve had years and years to practice mine. it takes time.”

“…are you sure?” the boy mumbled, “what if i never get the hang of it?”

a smile slipped onto atsuko’s face as she reached down to take the boys hand, turning it so his palm faced upward, she placed her hand beside his and beckoned her flame. the fire burned bright as she slowly slide her hand closer to his.

“focus,” she muttered, “focus on the heat.”

she watched as the other closed his eyes. as he did so, atsuko slid her flame onto his hand. the fire swayed slightly, flickering - but soon went back to a steady state.

“open your eyes.”

chilli’s lashes fluttered as he opened his eyes. he let out a surprised sound as he stared down at the fire in his palm. “…it isn’t going out.” he whispered. atsuko grinned.

I love it I don’t know why, what is it about mapping out the generations? The connections, the forming of larger families, expanding on them and seeing how the dynamics change? What is it about that which appeals to me?