#myfirstpaper

In sum, this draft requires a lot of clarifications in order to make the planned article really comprehensible and sufficiently transparent for professional critique.

The authors should opt for a less pretentious title.

"This paper is so basic, it's written by someone who is at a beginner level despite being in 4th-year college."

"If this was taken from a successfully defended thesis, as it appears to have been, then he should not have been awarded a PhD"

The turn of phrase "reaching out into the world"; is again just a vague rhetorical equivocation that is meant to add a semblance of an intellectual air to the text, a rhetorical attempt at being in fashion, but it dissolves only in empty intellectualism.

There are so many things wrong with this manuscript that I do not know where to begin

If I never see another piece of writing started with these lines, it will still be too soon.

" The authors have not bothered to learn the first thing about the theories they are hoping to refute with ill-designed experiments and muddled rationale."