#jake crew

This Home is My Home by Seeingsims

Characters used: Will, Jake, Meagan

Mentioned Characters: Natalie, Antwone, The band.

First of all, your pictures were so awesome. I seriously loved all of them. And I loved what you did with the characters. They all looked great and ,since this story was in the context of my own, they all fit their personalities well. That's actually something I was really impressed by. You basically captured their personalities perfectly, especially Will and Jake's relationship.

I loved the fact that this story was so simple but so interesting at the same time. It was just about Will wanting to move, but it was the interactions and dialogue between the characters that made it so great.

Your writing is really good and your thoughts flowed really well. But there were some grammatical errors and typos. But other than that I really enjoyed your story.