Story presentation
Even though I think it's a minor issue that people probably wouldn't pay attention to and would understand, I still feel the need to mention it because it would be strange otherwise.
As you may have already noticed, our writing style is a bit quirky, and here's the explanation: it's fun to make their stories sound like song lyrics, while also expressing their feelings or thoughts.
So, our writing will look like song lyrics without a song, combining literal dialogue to make it seem like a normal storyline.
The current story we're writing blends song lyrics with spoken dialogue.
(Emmy's example in the first one is more like song lyrics, while the second one is just blunt language. (Or rather, a mix) It's fun to mix them together)
In the old style, we would either use direct text along with the pictures, or mostly let the pictures explain things, Which is quite difficult to understand. So we tried changing the style. I don't know if this is better or not, but it's fun, so I'll continue using this style.
(You can criticize us, we just want to know what you think. Like, does it make the story easier to understand than the previous version?)
It's fun.














