could you scan the poem in the park by gwen harwood? we did it for class today and i'm curious to see if i got the metrical analysis and notation and whatnot right
Sure! I read this as iambic pentameter with some substitutions. You might divide the feet differently than me where there are substitutions! Because it's metrical but loose, I've marked with parentheses some places where dialectal differences or just stylistic ones could change the number of syllables, like in the word smile or flickering. Here's my take:
◡ – ◡ / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – She sits in / the park. / Her clothes / are out / of date. ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – Two chil/dren whine / and bic/ker, tug / her skirt. ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – A third / draws aim/less pat/terns in / the dirt – ◡ / ◡ – / ◡ – / – / ◡ – Someone / she loved / once passed / by – / too late ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ ◡ / ◡ – / (◡) ◡ – to feign / indiff/erence to / that ca/sual nod. ◡ – / ◡ – (◡) / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – ◡ “How nice” / et cete/ra. “Time / holds great / surprises.” ◡ ◡ / – – / ◡ – / ◡ ◡ / ◡ – ◡ From his / neat head / unques/tionab/ly rises ◡ – / ◡ – / – ◡ / ◡ – / ◡ – a small / balloon… / ”but for / the grace / of God…”
◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – (◡) / ◡ – / ◡ – ◡ They stand / a while / in flicker/ing light, / rehearsing ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – the child/ren’s names / and birth/days. “It’s / so sweet ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – to hear / their chat/ter, watch / them grow / and thrive, ” ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – (◡) / ◡ – ◡ she says / to his / depar/ting smile. / Then, nursing ◡ – / ◡ – (◡) / ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – the youn/gest child, / sits sta/ring at / her feet. ◡ ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ ◡ – / ◡ – / ◡ – To the wind / she says, / “They have ea/ten me / alive.”
Rhyme scheme: ABBA CDDC EFGEFG












