#hallowhq

Sure you can, darling! I’m going to start with the icon, which is pretty clearly two people in private school uniforms - so the plot probably has something to do with schools? My only suggestion is to make the icon a square so the people aren’t as cut off, or make it an icon where their heads can pop out (kinda like the flowers in my icon). To continue on, let’s take a look at the theme! This specific theme is getting really popular lately (it’s cute so I can understand why). It’s also a very organized theme, which I like. I would, personally, replace the icon with the two girls laughing with something more centered, because even in their little circle - it’s cut off and a little hard to see them. And the stark light gray room of the second icon, to me, doesn’t match the beige, pink, and darker/stony gray of the rest of the color scheme. But, it still looks nice and sets up the “academy” type roleplay. For the navigation of the theme, I would suggest adding the plot to location where the guidelines are - that just makes it so the plot is read first by those who are getting around the blogs, and not reading the guidelines before they even get to the plot! I also think you should set up a mobile navigation link in your description to help those who need to access the rest of the blog when they are not on a desktop/laptop. Otherwise, the links are organized in the way I would typically click through. I might just move the “wanted connections” and “taken fc” links before the apply link. And move the ooc list to after the application link.

Next is the plot! I really like that you wrote it in the style of an acceptance letter from the principal. It’s a unique style to write the plot in, as far as school rps go. I think for being simple, this is a really elegant school rp! My main suggestion, as far as the plot goes, is to add more detail. You could explain the campus a bit more, what kind of buildings are there, what’s the historic value of the land? What were the requirements for this student to get in? Is it a boarding-type school? I think that extending it and giving me more detail on the school itself would make me feel a lot more interested and invested in the plot. I also really like the idea of the tiered system in the school, the access to certain privileges. To me it seems to easy to get to the first tier, though, all someone would have to do is work hard in class - while in the other tiers, the students are subjected to also needing an extracurricular activity. So, I would reverse it and make it hardest to get to the first tier. Maybe it would require the students having two extracurricular activities, an A average, and honors based classes. While to be on the lowest tier, all you’d need is anything below a D average or below, no extracurricular, and possibly students are put on a Fourth Tier probation if they’re caught doing something against the rules of the school? That would, to me, seem more likely than the system already set up. Also, it might be a nice addition to the rp to have the “students” set up a class schedule. That way, when you do tier changes the specific task you give them may be related to one of their classes (like, if you’re in a Psychology class, a tier-change task could be the student must interview their fellow students, in a para or otherwise, on a certain psychology concept. Or the student might have to perform some social experiment at a party in the school). This would make the plot drops with tiers a lot more interactive with the school itself, and encourage students to do well in their “classes”. I think on this page you should also list the penalties for each tier if they break something from their tier. I wanted to commend you on the adorable location page you made! The graphics are beautiful and the information is great. I would suggest that you make the edit to this sentence “Although the outside might call of victorian era and old money,” to “Although outsiders may call the school of the Victorian era and old money.”  Also, “whole ‘nother world” doesn’t really make sense, it should just be “whole other world.” By adding the apostrophe and the n, you’re shortening “another” which the words “whole another world” doesn’t quite make sense. Anyways, I still think this page is very nice and good job in the whole worldbuilding side of things.

That’s all on the plot, but now I’ll go over rules in the section. I was a little confused about this rule, “i’d prefer if you used small gifs, to gif icons, or static icons, please.” Do you mean that you wouldn’t mind if all three were used, or do you just prefer the small gifs? If you just prefer the small gifs I think the rule should read like, “it’s preferred that you’d use small gifs, instead of the latter of gif or static icons.” And, is it still allowed to use these media platforms? The other thing I have to say about the rules, is I think you really can separate the rule of banned fcs and the rule of ooc drama. It helps to organize the rules better. On the topic of ooc drama, you don’t really discuss the penalty if it occurs? That might be something nice to add in. But, not necessary. I think that you should mention whether or not you allow suggestions to the banned fcs list on your rules page as well. Otherwise your rules are basic and cover the rp very nicely. As for your application, I like the addition of the TV Trope information, I rarely see it used anymore. This is just your basic appless character set up, though. I definitely think that you could develop this into a full app or semi-appless roleplay, though! I’ll finish with your checklist, which is absolutely fine. I think you’ve got a very organized way to introduce players into the rp! So, nice job there.