Hey All! I’ve been querying Affinity for Pain and I came to the conclusion that I needed to chop it down. I’ve changed up the first chapter. If you’ve read AFP before and would like to look at the new chapter, I’d love some feedback. If you would like to look at the new chapter and haven’t read the original you can totally help too. Either way, I’m looking for some people to read the first chapter as it is now and give some feedback. I’m looking for things like does it make you want to keep reading. Is it confusing? Were you drawn into the story?