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Hiya! The name is Chaotic Dinosaur. Yes, that is my real name (No it isn’t, but am I cool yet?) I love mary sue blogs and giving constructive criticism, so this blog is the brainchild of myself and a friend. Introductions over, leggo :D
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Basic Information Full name: Elisabeth Frances Nickname: Lizzie Gender: Female Species: Human Date of birth: Febuary 14 Nationality: Britsih
British. Blood status: B
That’s blood type, but alright. Either way, so far, so good. Wand: Oak with Phenix feather
Phoenix. Sorry, spelling is a pet peeve. Appearance Hair colour: Chestnut Brown Hair style: Long and Wavy Eye colour: Holly Green Skin tone: Pale Height: 5'4 Weight: 110lbs
The target weight for somone who is 5′4 is about 130. Character is underweight. Clothing style: Casual yet cute Accessories: Always has a cat's eye necklace on that her father gave her before he died Other distinguishing features: In the moon light her hair kinda looks like it sparkles
Sparkly hair? Is she a Twilight vampire? Personality Traits: Energetic, Bubbly, Friendly
No negative personality traits Dx Likes: Loves animals, butter bear, Burty Bots every flavoured beans, Strawberries, Sunny days, Hogwarts
Heh...heh heh....butter bear. Dislikes: Cruel people, Pranks, Snakes, chocolate frogs, thunder and lightening
You dun like Chocolate? D: Good at: Charms, taking car of magical creatures Bad at: Potions, Herbology Hobbies: Singing and Writing
Every sue is good at singing. Every. Single. One. Fears: Thunder, Snakes, Being alone Ambition: Wants to open her own shelter for abandoned Magical Creatures Family Father: Daren Frances (Wizard, Deceased) Mother: Samantha Frances (Muggle, Alive) Sibling: None Pet: Nightshade (Pure Black Cat) Family home: Lives in London Blood Status: Half-Breed
Half breed? Half blood, right? Social standing: Not super popular Family background: Her father hid the fact he was a wizard from her mother when he fell in love. He didn't tell her until she was expecting Elisabeth. Sadly when Lizzie was 5 her father passed away from a terrible accident.
Tragic backstory can help or hurt. Could fuel the Sue fire if written incorrectly. Individual magic Wand reaction when first held: A burst of stars erupted from the tip of it Boggart: Giant Snake that hissed Thunder
How doth one hiss thunder? Patronus: A Stead
Stead? Steed? Like a horse? Animagus: Black Cat with a white star on her hip Polyjuice: NA Amortentia: Strawberries, Salt Water and fresh baked bread
Peeta is that you? Prologue She grew up like any normal Muggle girl would. Her mother was a grade school teacher and her father had a job at the local post office. When she was 5 her father died leaving her mother to raise her all alone. Not knowing that her father had been part of a very well respected pure blood family, it came to a surprise when she received her letter to Hogwarts. Years at Hogwarts First year Sorted into: Hufflepuff
This is actually good. Not a whole lot of OCs are sorted into Hufflepuff. Best subject: Charms Favorite subject: Transfiguretions Favorite teacher: Professor Flitwick Worst subject: Herbology Least favorite subject: Potions Least favorite teacher: Snape Quidditch: Couldn't join Friends: Harry, Hermione, Ron, Neville, Susan Bones
Friends with canon characters. Tread carefully. Christmas holiday: Went home to visit her mom but wrote to Harry every day while away Other: First met Harry on the platform and quickly became close friends due to their mutual lack of knowledge on the wizarding world and both knowing the lose of a parent. She helped them see the good in Hermione. During the traps set up before the philosopher stone, she made sure to calm fluffy with out using the harp
How can she calm Fluffy? Second year Best subject: Charms Favorite subject: Transfiguretions Favorite teacher: Professor Flitwick Worst subject: Herbology Least favorite subject: Potions Least favorite teacher: Snape Quidditch: Joins as Hufflepuff's new keeper, cause she was able to keep her eye on the quaffle even at top speeds
And good at Quidditch. Friends: Harry, Ron, Hermione, Neville, Ginny, Susan Bones Christmas holiday: Went home again. Had invited Harry to come home with her but he declined having issues with the chamber of secrets. She wrote letters to him everyday instead. Getting regular updates on his plan to see who had been opening the chamber of secrets Other: Since she was half muggle she was sadly petrified with Hermione after a long night of studying. Seeing her like that nearly broke Harry's heart even though he didn't know why
I feel a canon character romance coming. Third year Elective subjects: Care of Magical Creatures, Divination Best subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite teacher: Hagrid Worst subject: Herbology Least favorite subject: Potions Least favorite teacher: Snape
She really doesn’t like Snape. Quidditch: Gets her spot again as Keeper helping them win against Ravenclaw and Slytherin. Sadly during their second game against Gryffindor he took a Bludger to her head and ended up in the hospital wing for a week in a coma. Unknown to her Harry visited her everyday after classes
Ah yes. Someone else got hit with a bludger if I recall correctly. Friends: Harry, Ron, Herminone, Luna, Neville, Ginny, Susan Bones Hogsmead: Loved spending time at Honeydukes, three broom sticks and even Zonko's joke shop. Once a month she volunteers at Grandull's home for Magical Creatures. Christmas holiday: She decided to spend her first Christmas at Hogwarts with her friends. At this point she had started to have feelings for her friend Harry. And was worried about him due to Sirius Black's escape. So she stayed back to be with him
So it has begun. Other: Having now known Harry for three years Lizzie had started to feel something for him. But wasn't completely sure what those feelings were. At the end of the year after finding out that Sirus wasn't the evil one but Wormtail, she tries to save her friends for werewolf Lupin thinking she could calm him like every other creature. Sadly she ends up getting tossed into the warping willow and getting a horrible scratch across her stomach. Except when he was saving Sirus, Harry spend all his free time next to her in the hospital wing. Making sure that her supply of Burty bots every flavour beans never dwindled
She can calm Fluffy but she can’t calm Lupin. Go figure! So she’s injured again and guess who visits her all the time....again. Fourth year Best subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite teacher: Hagrid Worst subject: Herbology Least favorite subject: Potions Least favorite teacher: Snape Quidditch: Sadly since the TriWizard Tournament she didn't rejoin the team. Instead she raged an internal war cause she wanted to cheer for Harry cause he was her best friend (and her crush) But the rest of her house expected her to cheer for her fellow Hufflepuff Cedric Diggory. Friends: Harry, Ron, Hermione, Luna, Ginny, Neville, Susan Bones Hogsmead: Just like the year before she starts to volunteer at Grandull's home for Magical Creatures once a month. When she wasn't their she hung out with the rest of her friends. Christmas holiday: Because of the TriWizard Tournment she stays at school like most of her classmates. For weeks she waited for Harry to ask her to the Yule Ball. Until she finds out that he wanted to ask Cho Chang. So with a broken heart, she accepts an invite from a fellow Hufflepuff. Just after she decides to go with a boy from her own house Harry asks her to be his date to the ball, which she had to decline even though she wanted nothing more than to say yes to. However when the ball finally came she couldn't help but smile when Harry's jaw dropped after seeing her in a baby blue gown that she had custom made for the event.
She made it or she had it made? I’m a bit confused by how it’s written. (Or maybe I’m just a derp.) Other: Having had to hide her feelings for Harry, she had been very unlike herself this year. She even was forced to distant herself from her Gryffindor friends because of her houses loyalty to Cedric. Fifth year Best subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite teacher: Hagrid Worst subject: Herbology Least favorite subject: Defense against the Dark Arts Least favorite teacher: Umbridge
Quidditch: Rejoins Hufflepuff's team as the keeper. She helped her team defeat Gryffindor 320-60 even though she was beyond worried for her best friend Harry after he took a Bludger to the head Friends: Harry, Ron, Hermione, Susan Bones, Ginny, Luna, Neville Hogsmead: She still volunteer's once a month but this year Grandull lets her run the shop by herself. On one of her free weekends she joins the rest of her classmates at Hog's head to join Dumbledore's Army Christmas holiday: Had gone home for the Christmas vacation to spend it with her mother but after receiving a letter from Harry telling her all about Mr. Wesley's attack she hops on the Knight Bus with Hermione and heads to 12 Grimmauld Place to be with him
Other: This was one of her favourite yet least favourite years at school. She hated Umbridge with a passion and often ended up in her office using the quill that uses her own blood to write. A fact that she hides from Harry until she learns he had the same fate. She loved joining DA but soon started to regret it when she watched Cho and Harry slowly get closer. Than when she heard of their kiss it nearly broke her heart completely in two. However when Cho and her friends were blamed for telling Umbridge of DA Harry's feelings for Cho quickly disappear and suddenly he seemed to finally see Lizzie in a new light. During the fight at ministry of Magic she gets into a one on one fight with Beatrice who ends up telling her it was her who killed her father. . . Her pure blood father. This throws her for a spin and she nearly gets killed until Harry comes to her rescue.
Beatrice? The only one I can think of remotely close to that is Bellatrix. Or am I missing someone? Also, hero Harry to the rescue. O.W.L. Scores: E- Care of Magical Creatures, E-Charms, O-Defense against the dark arts, O-Transfiguration, O-Astronomy, O-Divinations, A-Potions, A-Herbology, A-History of Magic Sixth year Dropped subjects: Divinations (Instead she uses her free time to volunteer more at Grandull's Home for Magical Creatures) Best subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite subject: Care of Magical Creatures Favorite teacher: Hagrid Worst subject: Herbology Least favorite subject: Defence against the dark arts Least favorite teacher: Snape Quidditch: This year she was rewarded captain of the Hufflepuff team and leads them to win second place this year. Friends: Harry, Ron, Hermione, Susan Brown, Neville, Ginny, Luna Hogsmead: Now that she can spend 2 hours a day at Grandull's home for magical creatures She is able to spend her weekends just hanging out with friends. Which helps bring her and Harry even closer. Christmas holiday: Spends Christmas at the Burrow with Harry and the Wesley's. While there Harry finally realizes his true feelings for Lizzie and was about to act on it when the burrow was attacked. He saved Lizzie from the burning building.
It’s lurv Other: After the shock that not only was her father murdered, Lizzie finds out that she is a half-blood. This throws her whole world around. Thankfully though she has her best friend turned Boyfriend, Harry, to help her. Having fallen in love, Harry helps Lizzie find out more about her fathers past only to find out that she was related to his deceased God Father. She was a Black! Wanting to repay him for helping her find out her past, Lizzie tells Harry that she is joining him on the Horcrux. He tells her that she can't come because Voldemort will use her against him but that she tells him that her feelings can wait. She kept them hidden for nearly six years. One more year won't kill her.
She’s a Black. Of course she is. How are they related? Seventh year Other: Doesn't go back to Hogwarts. Instead she helps the Weasley's set up for Their second oldest Son's wedding. Even though her and Harry agreed to keep their feelings secret from everyone it was hard. More than a few times they almost let their true feelings slip. In Dumbledore Will, he gave her one of his rings. It had a Phoenix engraved around it. She wore it everyday not knowing the true power it held. Once they were finally on the hunt it seemed to get easier to hide their feelings with Ron and Hermione there the whole time. After Ron runs out, on them, Lizzie helps Hermione keep it together. As the hunt continues her and Harry just get closer until the final battle. Where she ends up in a death match with a death eater. As Voldemort brings in Harry's lifeless body Lizzie feels her very soul break. She runs forward to go to him but Ron holds her back. She sobs as she watches on in horror. However when she see's Harry stand it was like she could finally breath.
Ah yes, Dumbledore’s ring. Also, she’s a therapist. Can one’s soul break? Epilogue After the Hogwarts battle, her and Harry were finally able to be together. First they go back to 12 Grimmauld Place and turning it into their new home. A year later he proposed to her and made her is wife. After having four kids, Lily, James, Hannah and Darren, Lizzie accepts a job as the new Professor of Care of Magical Creatures. Harry could not be more proud of his wife and everyday just falls even more in love with her.
But...Harry...and Ginny.... D:
All in all, the character needs some work. More negative traits for one, and maybe less interference in the canon plot. I would classify this as a Sue, but she isn’t the worst I’ve ever seen either. ^.^












