#agentlaurafrost

I see you asked for feedback and I can give a little: the prose is fantastic, I happen to like writing that is a little inventive in description and spends time fleshing out some of the events

The combat at the end felt a little quick- it was very easy for the wrath to defeat the knight, it seemed- whether that is intentional or not I cannot tell, but I believe a little more combat could flesh out these two characters a bit (especially the knight!) Showing readers some of their personality. And poor T7! My heart aches (which only draws me in further tbh) for my poor beeping friend. What a way to make it feel more real! It certainly raised the stress of the scene a few notches

that’s fair. i admit i glossed over the combat a little, i was kind of getting antsy to post something for feedback but i will definitely flesh that out more.

I did find the beginning a tad confusing. It was only in the last few scenes (and from my knowledge of SWTOR) that I realized the beginning was a vision. The way everything was described clued me in a tad, but I still found myself having to puzzle it out instead of diving into the piece

that’s also fair. my verrry first draft made the framing more explicit but it was also Hella Wordy (and got super bogged down in pre-mission boring shit) so i cut a lot of it. but, hm. maybe too much.