Hey it's Kris

I was really lazy in the first frame. This was just to try out video editing. I had fun with it.

Just realised that the empires gang reactions were a bit dark. Like can you imagine finding a group of people and then getting attached to them so much you refused to let them leave?

Or it was because of the death robot the hermits were gonna leave behind and the empires gang just want them to at least deal with that one so that their server doesn't get destroyed...

Nahhhh, the first one is way more fun to read.

Song 1: We become we. (I just kept thinking about the last part. Cause Derek definitely have the chance to fall in love with Avery. Meanwhile Avery just got to know him.)

Song 2: Gales of song eng ver. (This one is for Avery. Mostly how I think Avery would feel about Derek's death and he just need to deal with this alone. I guess the aftermath of dawtde. I need more angry Avery than crying Avery...)

Song 3: The haves have naught. (If you never listen to this one plsss listen to it. It sooo good! I think it's for derek. Maybe a conversation between him and the KIY. Ooh you can do visually, KIY was disguise as Avery. So fake Avery and Derek. It works because Derek is actually a very hopeful person despite his logical nature.)

Song 4: Wonderful (but like the bad ending. Like vessel! Avery au kinda thing. Just the final part. Like Derek and Avery just succumbed to the King In Yellow control. This one is bit of a stretch but I guess it can kinda work?)

Song 5: Say it (will Stetson cover) (another Avery one. I just really want to explore on the grieving part of his story. I guess this is the realistic take on what happened after Derek died. Like if there is no miracle, no other storyline. It was just that one freak horrifying experience that he just went through with no other reason.

ill add more if any comes to mind. Maybe not slimeknight. Maybe some other Minecraft fandom...

Anyone wanna pitch in ideas? cause I'm kinda new to the fandom and not sure about everything yet. Like I know stuff but definitely not enough.

I just finished part 1...

It was pretty good! (Next season is gonna suck so baddddd.....maybe...)

I love the moments!! Also the new mashup of the og intro with Dr intro was soooo good!

I actually don't hate how they bring back Jay's memories. Kinda wish they make a bigger deal of his hair though. Can you imagine if they did a Mulan and have him cut his hair dramatically.

Like"ugh! You guys let me walk around like that!!"

And everyone just roll their eyes like "great, Jay's back!"

Also they bring back Morrow! Even if that was a little bit....( a win is a win I guess)

Love everything in Sora's group!! Frak actually got some character arc. My boy!! Wlydfyre was the best thing to ever happen to this show.

So many people have trauma about the Land of Monsters... I wonder if that's going to be important for Kai....

things I would change for this season would be (most of these are for Lloyds...)

Have Lloyd fight his oni self in the trial

make him act more mystical and spiritual after finishing said trial.

Like when they ask him where to find the threat in the woods. Instead of just saying "I'm not sure" he added "but the roots/whispers will show us the way" leaves float and transitions to the gang fighting.

Have Arin's line changed from "Lloyd can't be failing!" to "Lloyd never gave up on me! So I won't give up on him!"

Have Lloyd bring the gang (Zane and the rest) using cool green power to the main battle.

Like suddenly the roots come out from the ground and it unravel to reveal them.

Have him dramatically walked across the battle field untouched and go "you reign of terror ends here Beatrix!" Cool transformation sequence.

Also have Lloyd use more nature based attacks. (You don't have to make him use it all the time maybe in big battles only..)

the final battle was a bit to long for me. Like they drag it out to much. But it was ok. I like how chaotic it was.

Kinda wish that La row was the one to help us with the incantations. Like a last minute redemption moment.

also what do you mean Cole didn't get a dragon form!! Justice for cole! (But I guess he did get a golem form....)

For the ending we get Lloyd looking over the team and smiling. But have him looking at some leaves float with the winds to the sky. As if he knows the universe is telling him that this is the calm before the storm. But he will be ready for it . They will be ready for it.

No words just expressions

And you can have ras does his villain stuff...

I hope we get see more of the source dragons!

I wanna hope that morrow might be important but he's not gonna is he.... At least bring back cinder!

Despite everything I don't want Wu to just come back. Cause it feels like that would just ruin most of the character development for most of the OG ninja. I hope he would actually passed and move to the spectral land.

So the au is supposed to follow crystallization season (I know that season kinda suck) where Lloyd unlock his Oni side.

But his Oni side never left and he become obsessed with trying to find ways to stop it or suppress it.

I got inspired by the lyric "I am the saviour of this world" in the song and the banter between the Emily and the doctor (I don't remember her name)

The whole story is a lesson on how Lloyd needs to learn to accept both sides of himself.

The reason I want to do season 4 is because there less stake in the season than all the others. And fugitoid would be the greatest guy for this

He would be told "oh Raph the leader for today"

And he would go "oh! Very well, where should we go today Raphael?" Like he would not questions anything. He'll just keep going , being supportive, the same way if Leo was leading

Throughout the whole thing, Raph would keep looking at Leo for reassurance when he makes any decisions. And Leo would just gives him thumbs ups. Think how adorable the scenes would go!

The team honestly were just waiting for Raph to mess up stuff and Leo would just go" ok that's enough" and take charge again. But he was weirdly calm throughout the whole thing.

I want a distinction in sensei Leo and splinter in their way of teaching the team.(Also build up for sensei Leo)

and the fact that this would have been one of the best way to show Raph 's character development. At how he's matured and gotten better at dealing with his flaws. They make him wanting to be leader in the story seems so important in the early seasons and then they never mention it again. He failed and that was it. I think it will be good for him to try to redeem himself.

Also just a scene I thought wou be funny to have.

Leo: you got this Raph!

Raph: Leo, the last time I lead the team, we got our butts kicked by snake weed. Snake weed!

Leo : Raph, when have any of our missions didn't went wrong?

Raph: well ,when you put it that way...

Ok let's just do this as simple as possible.

Season 1

The introduction season. We meet the main cast as well the the overlords.

Each character have a dedicated episode to them. Some ep are pairings and our main bad guys are the overlords. Mostly Valentino.

Charlie did the whole talk to Adam and it was bad. Extermination is happening in 6 months, not ideal for anyone. They have to prove the hotel works or the extermination is coming early or heaven might make it that this is a permanent schedule. But she doesn't tell the group cause she wants to the strong and dependent leader. So she tries her best to speedrun this thing but nothing is working until she broke down and the whole gang found out. They told her that she was stupid for trying to carry everything on her own and they hug and stuff. And tried to work together to find a solution.

Biggest focus is angel dust. Mainly his problem with Valentino. There a whole plot about overlords not liking them cause if the redemption thing works then they would be loosing souls. So we fight most of them about this.

They spent the whole season working on relationship and making themselves better. Especially about their crimes on earth.

Finale for this season, the gang make a whole presentation to show to Adam to convince him that this hotel will work, sing a song and everything. Only for him to go "nope" and broadcast the fact that extermination is coming earlier than expected. The season ended with the whole group stumped, hell is in a mast panic and alastor just went "well that productive!" Vaggie told him to shut up.

Maybe this whole season happens in the span of 3-5 months? I'm not sure about that...

Season 2

The overlords have a meeting. Extermination is happening in a few more months/ a month. (Depends on what suits better) Nothing is prepared and from the looks of it, the main cast might be the reason. So it's time for damage control. Velvet reveal the whole angels can be killed stuff.

Charlie tried to fix this. She had to contact her dad, Lucifer, who she has not talked to in forever. We got the s1 ep5 stuff. Lucifer agrees to get them a meeting with heaven. (Though I do think this whole convince Lucifer thing and Charlie rekindling with her dad should be at least a few ep like 2 ep or something?)

Charlie and Vaggie went to heaven to stop the upcoming war. We got the whole ep6. Now it's when things really start to go down.

Charlie is now task with actual preparing for war. Problem we spent the first season by pissing off most if not all the overlords. You know the powerful people we need help from. So they tried their best to do that. Also all of hell hates them now.

In the background the vees started their own plot.

Charlie tried to appeal to the overlords. They refuse to help her since this is her teams mess and personal stuff. Until for some reason Vox decided to back her up. And actually convinced the overlord gang to help her. It the "we live here and no one wants the extermination to be more frequent".(Whatever he did in 'bad with us'). Charlie is ecstatic that some of the overlord might actually be good people.

The Vees have a plan to take over hell by taking down as many overlords during the big fight. Cause no one is gonna bat an eye to a demon dying during extermination. It's just gonna be sad and unfortunate than suspicious.

Alastor, Vaggie and husk does not trust them one bit. But we still need their help.

I don't think all of the overlords will help but most of them will. They all provide something for the battle like Rosie employed the cannibals to help, Carmilla provided weapons. It said that the vees are planning something too. Like apparently Vox and Carmilla are collaborating on a weapon but it might not be ready. (And Carmilla was hoping not to use it)

I do think there should be plot about heaven a bit but Idk.

(I'm not sure if the final battle should be a whole new season or like a two/three part ep)

the final battle is here. The gang is ready. Everyone fought side by side. Alastor was supposed to fight Adam but he disappeared. So Charlie fought Adam. Vaggie fight lute and all that jazz. Lucifer show up fought Adam. Adam dies and the battle is won. But the vees are nowhere to be found. Carmilla realise that the weapon was being activated.

(This can be like a few hours ago thing)

The Vees on the other hand is scheming in the background. Alastor realize this and confront vox. Alastor thought that the plan was to take over hell but instead Vox revealed that he wanted to take over heaven and become god or something. So everyone agrees he's insane and tried to stop him. Alastor and Vox fight. Vox active the weapon from S2. Almost killed half of hell. Val and Velvet realise he's actually insane when he almost killed them too. So they tried to stop him.

Cut to the gang from the last scene. Everything is caught up. Now everyone is trying to stop the weapon and stop Vox. Alastor and him fought.

The weapon overcharged and almost take all of hell out. But everyone come together and stop the explosion from happening. Vox either dies from his injuries or you could make him kill himself like the suicidal man that he is. Alastor tries to stop it but was too late and he dies. Vox death was unclear that he would regenerate or it was permanent.

The battle is won. Sir Pentious still does and get redeem.

The epilogue shows everyone celebrating. Charlie do a whole monologue of what happened. The sinners cleaning up the street, hell no longer have extermination. The vees are dealing with fact they lost one of them. The gang rebuild the hotel and mourn pentious. Alastor was walking down the street when he met the newly regenerated Vox but something is different.

And in heaven, Emily and Sera found Pentious who is redeem. Lute meet up with Lilith.

And that is how I will do a re write. Personally i love all the songs in s2. It's just the plot feels rushed. As if the writers got to excited to do that plot they just abandoned the main gang.

I'm gonna try to figure out which song can be salvage for my version of a re write.

For a show with 'sinners can come back after dying in hell' as a rule in the world, they are really scare to kill characters. Like you can kill the cast and make them come back but that doesn't make the deaths have less weight. They did still die.

And I think vox arc felt a bit rushed. Like there's supposed to be some build up to it. I feel like it would have been more fun to watch him lose his mind if we don't see him spiralling at all throughout the show until that very moment.

And his fight between the Vees in that big battle would have more weight if he was shown to be the level headed one in the group. Like in s1.

Imagine if we spent like a season or two with Valentino or Velvet doing stuff. While Vox is just in the background, supporting them. Not really fully committed to what their doing but not stopping them either. Until they went to far and pull them out of their mess. He is the more stable feeling of the three.(Sure he can still lose his cool when it comes to alastor.)

So when he did lose his stuff, the scene have more impact. Cause before he was the voice of reason. He was the one to find the solution. I'm not saying he's perfect and a saint. But Vox was more composed, always in control, his real emotions barely shows. Then he lost it and decided to take everyone down with him when the plan went wrong. Valentino and Velvet can't stop him because he never done this before. (Not like Valentino angry fits or Velvet brash decisions) They almost talked him out of it but he refused.

Sure, they could use force like in cannon where Val just ripped his head off. But I feel like Vox should have died. It's not about sinners or winners. It's not about heaven and hell. But about his own personal problems he never fix and ego.

And frankly I would use Vox's death for alastor character arc. But that's another post by itself.

(this is where I started writing my own fic- I mean my own version of how I would have done the plot!)

What if the plot is Charlie having to gather up all the overlord to fight against heaven in the s1 finale. And vox is one of the main guy who is weirdly supporting her also one of the main reason that the the overlords are helping the main cast. Like he helped Charlie convince them. You can use the "I live here and I don't want to die from extermination and lose the souls under me" as a reason. Most of the group just let it slide. Characters like vaggie and alastor does not trust him at all. Then it's revealed that he did have bigger motif.

Alastor thought that Vox's big plan was to take out as many overlords as possible during the extermination. Cause this one they are actually out in the open (I'm assuming the overlords just usually hide and wait it out, like in the pilot) so that he can become the top of hell. When it's later reveal that vox actually was aiming for heaven. Maybe even the Val and Velvet didn't know about that part. As far as their concern the plan was to take over hell, but hey it still works so they just go with it. But then it just go like how S2 went. Vox almost taking out half of hell. That the fight turn to be about stopping him. Maybe not all of the cast. Charlie and the gang could be taking down Adam and the Vees with maybe alastor take down Vox.(Maybe some other overlords too)

They take down the exorcists and killed Adam. Vox dies and his plan failed.

also another thing I have been wondering. Idk if Viv has answered this somewhere else but if sinners died and they had done modification to themselves, would they come back as how they were or their original first form when the first spawn?