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Okay so usually describing wounds / or what the character feels during this is way more than “blood/pain/blood/ouch/hurts”.

Describing the atmosphere according to the character.

– They might feel dizzy, their vision starts to deteriorate/ ground sways under their feet/ light gets brighter/ dark spots/ etc etc

– Fatigue /\ /\ /\

– Their body will/might start to feel extreme temperatures // could be a sign of infection // but not necessarily, feeling extremely hot and sweaty and nauseous or sticky, that kind of stuff.

– Automatically your body will try to press or cover the wound; your palms will probably press against it to stop or block bleeding etc.

– Eyes rolling up that movie kind of shit - might happen though.

– Your character might -

    - gasp / grunt / groan / moan

    - hiss / yelp / scream / shriek / wail

– Their muscles will probably tense and they’ll clench their teeth too.

ALSO even after they’ve recovered or still are recovering mention the wound; describe how you character has to sit uncomfortable, describe how your chracter needs someone to take care of him, describe how you character can’t take a bath on his own and curses because they can’t screw the cap of a jar open, describe how every time they use a gun their shoulder shifts uncomfortably and they need to start their combat abilities from scratch again.

Here are less/not that fatal injuries that can still be ‘part of the story’ but the character will try to hide it and continue on with whatever it is they’re doing  –

- bruises / scratches

- being pierced by neighboring rubble or as a form of torture - figure that out yourself

- trauma

- burns/// this is a really interesting injury tbh

- dislocated joints

- sprained/twisted ankles or wrists

- not an injury but they’ll probably try to hide tiredness/fatigue

 Alright, now injuries are pretty interesting to write - even more fun to read about or maybe I’m just sick up there. Sorry. This is gonna be another long 

When you write about injuries or your character having been injured fatally to the point that their vision is blurry and they’re losing a lot of blood - NO NO YOUR CHARACTER CANNOT JUMP RIGHT BACK UP AND GUN EVERYONE DOWN AND KILL THE ENEMY. Please let it make sense,

It depends on how much blood they’ve lost/are losing and torn muscles or broken ribs or jaws and fatigue - it doesn’t matter if your character has been trained to death; they may have a stronger stamina and skillset but they will get tired. I’ll get to that after ‘injuries’.

Now uh there are types of injuries/traumas so let’s cover that -

Bullet Wounds : depending on whether it grazed or hit surface skin it’ll sting or hurt like a bitch respectively. Any important body parts like the head, shoulder, abdomen, leg muscles will be fatal and it’s more than just the ‘pain’ - I’ll label these as ‘x’. Even just a part of your wrist or palms or feet will hurt the same and you’ll lose a lot of blood. Other than the muscle tearing; fatigue, dizziness, broken bones (depends where the bullet hit), paralysis, infection/fever is likely. For ‘x’ you definitely need medical care - the sooner the better. It’ll be unbearable, you’ll sweat everything will feel hot and maybe just pass into unconsciousness if you’re lucky.

Stab Wounds : These depend on the weapon used? glass/ceramic (like pieces of glass) might leave residue or shards. Actual knife or dagger/sword material is easier to use. It will burn like hell, shallow wounds will probablt just sting though. Again the character will feel dizzy and infections could occur. If the stab has affected veins then it’s likely that the blood loss is slow; wounds on the thigh, chest, neck it’s likely that larger blood vessels have been affected and liekly bleeding out even faster and maybe. . . death. BUT it’s unlikely that the character’s aorta will be damaged.

Punches/Blunt Force Trauma : Trauma CAN be fatal, for punches and kicks it might ache constantly after your character has been abused. Internal bleeding can lead to death. Or damage to bones (broken bones) can pierce neighboring organs. Hard blows can knock people out and leave them unconscious. Other than that, it’s likely that the area will bruise/swell etc.

How do you fix this shit?

– Blood loss; definitely the first thing to handle - uh if the weapon is still in the body, do not remove it. It’ll prevent more blood from gushing out or can cause further damage when taken out (weird arrows or rugged daggers). Find a way to bandage the wound with the weapon until actual medical care is available. Apply pressure on the major ‘arteries’.

– Constant blood loss = likely to go into shock.

Read about shock on :https://aminoapps.com/c/books/page/blog/writing-realistic-injuries-pain-shock/KPiM_uJwqG464LqpELWox5DqJBqz7fm

– Research, even just a stab to your shoulder can get you fucked up and dead within a week - even better if it’s infected.

– Red streaks/lines which lengthen from the wound is a sign of infection.

You want to kill someone real quick? = stab them right below the base of the skull and they’ll be dead before they hit the ground.

AFTER INJURY : NO your character cannot just hop back to work; bullet wounds take at least weeks or months to recover from, stab wounds will leave scars and restricted movement - plus you’ll have after effects and if any bullet pieces remain in your body because they couldn’t be taken out then it’ll cause discomfort. Worse case is that your chracter will need to walk around with a stick, good luck hero.

I’ve read loads of mafia fanfictions, some were your straight up “the leader gets a guy and the rival gang kidnaps the guy and a huge ass war breaks out and they get the guy back and kisses” if you really want to know - yes wattpad however i switched up a few months ago - archive of our own; a few amazing ones were really detailed and actually made me change my whole opinion and how i perceived gangs thank you @/sugamins for house of cards.

Anyway so here are a few important bullet points to think about before writing about these kind of au s,

Let’s start :

– Now mafias usually consist of smaller groups of gangs - you have the main boss or whatever and then under them you’ve got a group of average number of people  that are entrusted to carry out orders/tasks. Usually led by old men who don’t do much shit and just attend meetings to satisfy the boss or they get killed (I’m joking) If these old men exist then there will be younger or people in those groups that take power and orders into their own hands. They’ll do it their way but still carry out the task. (hope that made sense)

– Mafias are constantly running (obviously, or the entire thing falls down), to assert dominance, they need money - everything runs on money. I mean it, money = everything. The richer the stronger. However; The smarter the better.

– Drugs, guns, prostitutions, gambling, corrupting taxes, running the stock, keeping order.

– Smaller people are usually not paid attention to, unless something is suspicious, your boss will not focus on runners (runners carry packets to get to client) or soldiers; unless it causes them huge loss or difficulty.

– Smaller rank = smaller clients. vice versa

– Most mafias run brothels on consent, workers are paid and want to do their job but then again it depends on how those people are. If you don’t like what you do, you won’t do it right = clients will complain - no mafia wants that.

– MAFIAS HAVE DOCTOR|S|/MEDIC|S|, it’s not just one doctor working his ass of for the main character and his gang getting shot all the time.

– Mafia’s always have rivals/opposition so that overused trope is not wrong or insensible. (depends on how you write it)

– Most mafias have “festivals” or occasions where bosses meet (bosses gotta have fun man) whether to discuss work or a celebration.

– They usually have a way to identify their own kind; tattoos, words, shoes (shoes??? wtf michelle)

– Psychological thinking or strategizing > Weapons/ “just getting to the fight”. Mafias can be ruthless but they still care about its own and try to cause less causalities - for themselves.

– Keep in mind the mafias are huge, there is no way they will entrust just one drive or system with all their information/details. They would have different mmethods of containing information and/or more than one SSD drive. (If your mafia uses drives/floppy disks/RAM)

– Sudden disappearance >>> unexpected death. If someone gets killed unexpectedly, it’s very likely and often overlooked. However someone’s disappearance is definitely unusual and will be investigated - not necessarily by the boss, it could be investigated by partners or friends which care too.

– Double-Crossing is a big NO.

Okay so I’ve read a lot of fanfictions - so much that i’ve had to get up an hour before my exam to cram syllabus because i was reading last night -

Let’s talk about how there are loads of gay/lesbian/bi sexual representation (to the point where people fetishize - ackgross) but you hardly come across asexuals or trans or polyromantics?

There’s more to the closeted gay having a crush on the baseball bully or the black and pink opposites lesbian couple, or being rejected by your popular straight best friend but you can’t get over them. These plots aren’t bad per se, they’re just overused to the extent that it’s boring and common and stereotypical - unless you can write these plots really well.

Stop telling yourself that “there’s already 4 homosexuals gotta add some straights too”, i mean sure go ahead there’s nothing wrong with that but usually you’ll find that there are loads of lgbtq people around you closeted or not, and it can end up with the heterosexual being the “token straight” instead. I understand if you overuse character properties or characteristics and even then there are so many ways lgbtq people express themselves it’s so diverse to write about.

Here’s overlooked and supposedly hard-to-write orientations or identities and how to write about them ( a small blob of tips you gotta figure the rest out !! talk to people !! )

In case you want to write about more diverse people; i’m doing a few because this takes some research and my brain is fried = if you want certain identities or sexualities then reply/comment

Polyamarous/Polyromantic relationships!! - there’s more to just great poly-sex - write about how they display romantic affection, how they care for each other and treat each other equally !! healthy relationship !! don’t get one to hate the other two because that one feels they’re closer, it happens but this isn’t your trio friend group - poly relationships are strong and well-built and they’ve likely discussed boundaries as well; have them cuddle and go to dinner together or watch the sky and tell each other how they’re grateful for both/however many.

Aro/Asexual!! - aha alright this one’s something i wanted to write about but never got to it, asexuals are really interesting to write about if you do your research. Have the partners talk about boundaries!! Of course whoever identify as this have different preferences, some date - some don’t, some kiss - some don’t, some like hugs - some don’t. MUST DISCUSS BOUNDARIES, it’s gross to read one of them trying to make out when the other doesn’t want it, (respect their sexuality and choice of affection not everyone has a vigorous sex drive) anyway there are so many ways to express love// have them make each other something (food/cookies/tea), again watch the sky together, randomly tell them how you feel, overused trope but im a sucker for it - have the other get sick and they have to take care of them. if your character wants to kiss them or hold hands !! ask permission - consent is sexy.

Non-binary/Agender!! - Alright have them use pronouns (obviously) not all nbs or agenders go with they/them, have them dress masc or fem, constantly switching (THIS DEPENDS ON CHARACTER BTW) some nbs hate getting called your usual (girl boss/dude/bro/etc) keep that in mind. Not all nbs have short - halfway bald hair. DO NOT STEREOTYPE. Have their partner call out people who use wrong pronouns and introduce them as neutral term (whatever they prefer).

Demisexuals!! - These relationships are pretty, they’re very close and strong - i assume - since you need deep emotional connection + you can write and explolre so much with a demisexual character. Demisexuals will usually not base their opinions or attractions on looks (this doesn’t mean they’re blind or don’t care how you present yourself; how you dress/the effort you put into yourself says quite a lot) what i mean is that demis will usually not “the hot football muscular guy walks through the door catching their eye for a second” THEY CAN FIND PEOPLE ATTRACTIVE it doesn’t mean they’d be licking the floor for that person. it’ll be like “huh cool hair” - goes back to their book. These kind of relationships need bond duh and they take time to open up (everyone does). Slow burn is definitely it. A relationship will likely dip and then get back on track. Realization (of them liking the other) would be amazing to write about. Have them sneak out just to be with the other and smile a lot when they’re with them or have them talk about personal things and cry and comfort each other (sexy)