【KagePro】 KuroEne Hand Heart YCH Commission by MOT 🖤💙🐍🐇
"You and me, until the end of the world." ❤️🫶
Kuroha (Saeru) and Ene "You and Me" Hand Heart YCH Commission by MOT (@/tikkeul5)
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Ouroboros 🐍♾️
Ouroboros, the snake devouring its own tail, represents the eternal cycle of destruction and rebirth. Eternal return.
Intro Rambles ❤️
KuroEne Rough Sketch Concept by Sen (@/stepswordsen)
Original Composition (Poses) by MOT (@/tikkeul5)
I commissioned MOT to draw my beloved KuroEne as an Album Style Cover 🖤💙🐍🐇
MOT has a lovely art style, design, and aesthetic sense, so I wanted to request KuroEne with MOT's "You and Me" Hand Heart YCH (Your Character Here) Template. ❤️🫶
I created a rough sketch concept (up above) to serve as a visual guide, to help clarify details such as their design details, colours, expressions, and the chosen text. ✍️
I'm very touched that MOT accommodated all of my requests, and incorporated many elements from the rough sketch I included in the request form 🥺🙏
I was overjoyed when I received the final piece! They perfectly captured what I envisioned! 🥰💗💘
I sent the commission form at night, and saw the final artwork when I woke up in the morning. I was so stunned at how MOT delivered the art so quickly, with such high art quality. 🤯‼️
The rest of my rambles are under the cut~ ✨
Requests 🎨
MOT kindly incorporated all of my requests I specified! ☺️
I specified the expressions, colours, and text. 😌
I also requested for Ene to be drawn with open circle pupils, and for Saeru to have black nails (since it's an HC of mine), and for them both to be drawn with eyelashes 🖤💙
I also asked that the playback duration numbers to be changed to XX:XX.
The playback duration numbers XX:XX represents that it is infinite (never ending) ❌♾️
Their ship name is included as: クロエネ (KuroEne)
I was wondering what to use for the Album Cover's Main Title, and eventually settled on "Ouroboros ♾️"
I also considered ship epithets like "Last Dance" and "Love is Karma" because "Last Dance at World's End" is the name of my KuroEne AU.
But I figured it'd be more fitting to go with "Ouroboros ♾️" since it's just too cool as an Album Cover Title, and I wanted a unique ship epithet for each of my ships.
"Ouroboros ♾️" is immediately recognizable as them, and perfectly encapsulates their relationship. 🐍♾️
I love Ene being drawn with white open circle pupils. I think it really fits her cyber-esque design. 🌐
I always depict Saeru with black painted nails. It feels like such a natural HC, that I completely forget he doesn't have them in canon. It just fits him so well... 🤭🖤
I wanted Ene to have bright ice blue eyes against Saeru's vivid blood red. ❤️💙
Ene has circular pupils, so her design has softer shapes, in comparison to Saeru's sharp snake eye pupils. Saeru also has sharper shapes (messy hair tufts).
I also figured it'd fit for them to both have neutral, calm and composed expressions while gazing at each other intensely. 🤭💞
I was thinking of the colours having a atmosphere similar to these shots! 🖤❤️💙🤍
I wanted the colours to be reminiscent of late Outer Science Saeru with glowing red eyes and blood soaked hands… ❤️
Saeru with red eyes is a great detail, since it implies that Awakening Eyes is in use. It's also a cool reference to his bloodied hands and glowing red eyes in Outer Science. ❤️
That's also why I chose the colour of their hands and the BG colour to be red! 👍
Thoughts 💭
When I sent the comm form at night in my time, I was NOT expecting to see the finished art when I woke up in the morning. 🤯
The finalized art was sent after 8 hours. I was awed at MOT's drawing speed.
I SCREAMED. THEY'RE SO BEAUTIFUL 😭 🥹 🙏 🛐
THE COLOURS AND EXPRESSIONS ARE PERFECT 💘💞❣️
It's so gorgeous… The way MOT drew their design details is so pretty… 😭💘💞🙏
They perfectly captured what I had envisioned!
KuroEne doing the heart hands pose together is so sexy. 🫶
I love how they harmonized the colours. The expressions, colours, and details are stunning… 🥺🙏
The colours and atmosphere are perfect… The intense gaze on each other is just 😘💗❣️🫶
I figured that I'd make a rough sketch to clarify their design details, expressions, and the placement of colours and text. I sent it along with the request form ❣️🫶
I'm very touched that they used elements from my rough sketch (how Saeru and Ene's hair, eyes, facial markings, etc., are drawn) 🤭
I love the contrast of Saeru's vivid blood red against Ene's ice blue for opposite (opposing) colours~ ❤️💙
With Saeru taking black/red and Ene taking white/blue colours, they have perfect contrasting colours. The visual contrast is so perfect… 🖤❤️💙🤍
The design sense and aesthetic are just impeccable… 🖤💙
Review ✨
This is the review I sent~ 💖✨
The artwork is so beautiful~ I love it so much! 🥹💞 You captured the characters’ expressions, colours, and details, so perfectly! 🖤💙
This is my first time using CREPE as a client. I sent a commission request before going to bed, and the artwork arrived when I woke up in the morning. ‼️
I was speechless that you finished the artwork so quickly! Your work speed is so fast, and the quality is amazing! It is exactly as I imagined. ☺️🙏
The atmosphere is incredible. Your art style, aesthetic sense, and attention to detail are so amazing. It exceeded my expectations! 😭💞
I’m super happy! I keep staring at this masterpiece 🥺💖 The intense gazes and expressions are just too good… 🫶
You adjusted the text colour to fit the design, which I love, because the bright red colour really makes the artwork stand out. ❤️
Incredibly kind, and easy to communicate with. Thank you for accommodating my additional requests, such as Saeru's black nails 🙏
I was so touched that you incorporated all of my requests. You even included elements from the sketch I included as a rough guideline. 🥹💖
Thank you so much for the amazing commission! 🥰💗 I will definitely order again in the future~ ✨
I wanted to send a tip to show my appreciation. 🙏 The final artwork is truly outstanding. 💙🖤
Thank you very much once again~ 🥰💞 I will definitely be back as a customer in the future. ☺️🙏
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“You've been invited into the snake's den, and now, I'll consume you whole. And my venom will be sweet poison, yes...”
Summary: Saeru approaches Ene with the offer to create her a new body, and invites her to come live with him.
A KuroEne AU where Saeru builds an android body that Ene can transfer her consciousness into, so she can move around in the real world again.
Saeru invites Ene to come live with him in one of his spare homes while keeping his darker tendencies hidden, and the two eventually develop an intimate relationship.
Snippets of my fave lines will be posted under the cut~ 💗
Ellipsus Previews: Fave Snippets ✨
These are my fave lines from my KuroEne Fic so far. 💗
The most refined ones imo.
(Not in order, this is just a random assortment of fave lines)
Ellipsus Previews: Other Fave Snippets ✨
These ones aren't as refined, so I have to clean them up and add to them later, but I still like them.
They have good ideas ^^
Tentative Notes ✍️
Tentative Draft for now :3
Wanted to test how the tags and notes will look. 📝✍️
The Notes section is tentative rn, since it depends on which ones I'll include in the Fic.
KuroEne Fic: Summary 🖤💙
My KuroEne Fic is basically the lead-up to Kuroha/Saeru meeting Ene and offering to build her an android body so she can move around in the real world again, and their intimacy. 🖤💙
Saeru uses his knowledge to build an android body for Ene, that she can transfer her consciousness into (since he's basically a living encyclopedia that holds knowledge from the beginning of civilization, all the way up to modern science)
Saeru's temptations, the call of a devil pretending to invite Ene to "paradise," under the guise of a "perfect/ideal lover," fully intends on dragging her down to hell with him.
Their intimacy is a metaphorical dance/eventual fall to hell.
I'm pretty satisfied with how the elegant prose style in this Fic, captures Saeru's dark eroticism... 🖤🐍
It shows his twisted view of love, indeed.
Saeru's temptations are definitely more in line with the "Demon/devil tempts their lover with honeyed words" kind. 😈😇🪽
Saeru is 3rd person narrator, so the Fic is from his POV.
This chara has a dark, cunning, calculative side. He's twisted and manipulative by nature. I wanted to be able to portray that. 👍
KuroEne AU: Context 📝
(I worded it better before in prev posts, so need for me to write it all again, but here's a short summary)
As I said, his main goal in the KuroEne AU is the same as in canon. He acts on a one track minded desire to fulfill Azami's wish with the utmost devotion. He wants to fulfill his purpose, what he was created for.
His secondary goal in the KuroEne AU is that he wants to make his S/O crave him and be addicted to him, by becoming the center of their universe.
He's trying to compensate for losing a sense of purpose when Azami forgot about him, by making his existence become "necessary" to someone.
Golden Apple of Immortality and Pseudo Immortality 🍎💛
I just think about how KuroEne are exact opposites in every single way, with characters and personalities that balance each other out perfectly. 🖤💙
And yet also, what they share (have in common), is a "connection to pseudo immortality," at least in some way...
Saeru inadvertently managed to succeed with the (pseudo) immortality he was searching for with her body. Regardless of whether it's in canon-verse, or my AU.
In canon-verse, Ene got a pseudo immortal body via Opening Eyes, and in the AU, both that and the android body he made.
KuroEne → Possession of pseudo immortality, and craving for it...
Ene → Possession of pseudo immortality due to her cyber body (via Opening Eyes)
Saeru → One who craves pseudo immortality (and uses the time loops to keep up his pseudo immortality)
KuroEne Fic: Rough Outline 📝
Saeru's inability to understand the selfless love of Azami and Konoha - the kind Azami harboured for her family.
Saeru recalls a memory of his Master cradling a baby Shion, Mary's mother.
Saeru's motivations for indulging with a human, wanting to find a way to spice up the cycles to appease his boredom
Saeru's motivations for seeking out Ene (realizing he could weaponize her connection with his body's vessel)
Saeru recalling his 1st meeting with Ene, approaching her with the offer to make a body for her
Saeru's observations of Ene, and how he's charmed by her, and her nature
Saeru working on building the android body for Ene, which instigates his obsession
Saeru can read her so well due to his excellent observation skills, making Ene believe he's the only one who can understand her, and thus, gets attached to him
(I still need to add to the Fic ofc cuz it's a super rough draft)
Other Rambles
I'm extremely picky about their (KuroEne's) characterization. So I did feel like my 1st KuroEne fic shouldn't be a short drabble, but one that's able to capture their essence as a ship. 🙏 So it's a retelling of my AU 👍👍
I wanted to write a Fic that'd sum up their relationship in my KuroEne AU succinctly. I want it to be able to portray the essence of how I see them... 💗
Since I want my first KuroEne fic to be able to capture the essence of my KuroEne AU, and their relationship, in ways I'd be satisfied with. 🤗
I want to take my time writing it so I'll be working on my Fic on the side, over the next few ~ couple months! I wanna make sure it turns out well. 🙏
Art and dialogue scripts (often seen in film/screen writing) come naturally to me, cuz I imagine the ideas visually (so they're based on my visual imaginations)
To me, the best lines are the ones that rely on my own chara analysis and interpretations/observations of them. ❤️
I originally planned to do a short Fic drabble but I just kept adding to it LOL
I think it's gonna be a long Character Study Fic. Realistically, it's gonna be in the 2k ~ 5k words range, at least.
I started writing it in mid March. It's been really fun to write! 💗 I love getting to infuse my character analysis and interpretations of them into my writing 🤭
A lot of the dialogue lines from my fic, come from dialogue scripts and rambles I wrote back in 2024. Though, I also wrote a lot of new lines (which are either based on my old rambles, or written from scratch)
I'm so picky with my stuff, so I fuss a lot over how to word things. Just like my dialogue scripts, I write the rough drafts first, then refine and reorder them as I continue.
I really like writing in this elegant prose style!! 🙏
I yoinked a lot of dialogue from my old KuroEne AU dialogue scripts. ✌️ 🤸
I think my dialogue is much stronger since I have experience doing Dialogue Scripts (turning my art ideas into play/film script format), but I still love a lot of the lines I wrote.
KuroEne reviving urges in me that I haven’t had in like 5 - 10 years like OMFG... The power of love is real... 🥺🥹🙏
I've been drawing for over a decade, so I really didn't expect to seriously take up learning how to do Fic writing for the 1st time.
Like I haven't had the urge to seriously write Fic for several years cuz I always thought "I should stick to art as my main creative art form" 🤔💭
But then I got hit with the urge to write for them. So it's my first time learning how to write Fic ❤️
Yippee!! 🤭 ❣️
Poems
Takane, Haruka, Konoha, Kuroha/Saeru, Takane/Ene
I've been reading Ogura Hyakunin Isshu poems more because I wanted more exposure to poetic prose. I love the Hyakunin Isshu so much... 💗
I feel like reading poems in the past few months have really helped my prose.
While slowly working on my KuroEne fics on the side, I feel like reading poems made me become more conscious of sentence flow, structure, and word choice… 💭
Reading poems only improved my way of writing dialogue/prose, me thinks… 🤗
Before, I'd mainly just think of converting my visual ideas/imaginations to dialogue script format… My way of writing dialogue def improved over time with practice.
My main concern would be prose, whether it's in character (which is easy enough for me), and if it sounds good.
After some exposure to reading more poems, when I write, I contemplate a lot about how the words sound, and if they flow well.
I get really indecisive, so I often rewrite lines with different wording to see which one sounds best… 🤔
Glad that I started taking this journey cuz there are lines from my KuroEne Fic WIP that I really love… :> 🖤💙
Since I've been drawing for over a decade, I'm way more confident about my art than my writing. 🙏🤲
As a newbie writer atm, I feel like my writing has to rely heavily on my characterization portrayals of them. And some poems inspo 📝
A lot of my fave dialogue lines were taken from my KuroEne AU dialogue scripts, cuz I'm way better with dialogue. But I wrote a lot of fave new ones recently too :>
Ellipsus
Ellipsus is SO cool. I've been using it to write my Fics. 👍
I usually write most of my dialogue scripts on Notion since it's my all in one digital workspace ✍️
I've been trying out Ellipsus to write my fic drafts! I love the Share Snippets feature that lets you share your fave lines as quotes 🤭💗
Gonna start backing up my rambles and writing on both Notion and Ellipsus~
Ellipsus' formatting is SO nice 🤗 I love the folder organization, Drafts, Focus Mode, Share Snippets, and Reader Preview features ✨
I love how Ellipsus lets you organize your Fics in folders. I love the UI, the Drafts feature to compare changes between multiple Drafts, and the Share Snippets feature that lets you share your fave lines as nicely formatted quotes. 😌 🙏
"I want to take a bite out of you, find out what you’re thinking."
Intro Rambles 💗
KuroEne with MR2 Saeru 🖤❤️💙🐍 🐇
Snake go mlem 🐍
Saeru can use Awakening Eyes to change his body into whatever he wants. That's genderfluid swag to me 🏳️⚧️🌈‼️
I headcanon that he can transform his body to have a long forked snake tongue like many demon charas do. 😈
I love the expressions so much... 😚 I love how the colours turned out too 🤭 I love using saturated colours 💓
This really captures what I had in mind for their Red/Blue visual contrast. I love when Saeru takes more blood red tones compared to Ene's cool blues. ❤️💙
I wanted to draw KuroEne in traditional clothing~ 👘
I'm planning for them to wear Việt Phục inspired outfits (or loosely inspired EA/SEA fashion)
We'll see. I'll play around and experiment 💝
I just wanna post my WIP progress shots and post my rough coloured sketch drafts atm 🙏
Design Inspiration 🎨
The hair and horn shapes are inspired by the lovely MR2 (Manga Route 2) Saeru redesign by Dirtsooop (@/dirtsooop) ❤️
I love this redesign version that takes more inspiration from Azami's design, the fluffier hair, and sharper, devil-like horn shapes... ❣️
I prefer to draw MR2 Saeru with fluffier hair and sharper shape language in general, since it fits my art style more, and also cuz villains are usually designed with sharp pointy shapes to indicate a sense of danger. 😈✨
I think it fits him so well since villain charas are usually designed with sharp, pointy shape language to indicate a sense of danger.
It inspired me to do an MR2 redesign where he has more Azami inspired traditional clothes 👘😌
You can read under the cut if you'd like to see my art process (WIPs) and rambles about my HC version of MR2 Saeru with traditional clothing inspirations. 👘
Art Process 🎨
Alt Versions 🎨
Tested different gradient maps :>
I added some new ones that adds some post processing effects. They're also nice, but I prefer my more subdued colours up top 👍
The coloured line Auto Action I use lowers the lines opacity, uses Gaussian Blur on the lines, adds Saturation, then sets Layer Mode to Colour Burn or Multiply.
Colour Burn has a super nice vibrant effect on the lines, but it doesn't work on near white colours, so gotta fix that ✍️
Multiply lowers the lines' opacity so it blends in more with the colours underneath, has more of a subdued look. Multiply has dark lineart but lowered opacity.
I wanna combine aspects from both eventually to have both the glowy lines on the outside, and softer look on the lines 💞
MR2 Saeru HCs 🐍👘
In my HC version of MR2 Saeru, he wears traditional clothing and takes more design inspirations from Azami's design. 💗
I love everything down to the face. I don't vibe with the outfit tho, so I'd just draw my redesign/HC version instead. ✍️
Cuz I fuck with everything on this design EXCEPT for the canon design's crop top and X-shaped strap (and entire clothes, tbh)
I love the black snake scales on his face, the cute little tufts of hair and black horns, the braid in the back that looks like a scorpion's tail, red sclera and red gradient limbs, and the white sash with bloodstains on it. 🥰
Just not everything else 😭
In my HCs, he wears a long, thin floating scarf loosely inspired by the Chinese hanfu shawl Pibo (披帛), as well as the Japanese floating scarf, Tenne (纏衣/天衣) or Hagoromo (羽衣) 🤍🧣
Tenne/Hagoromo are long, thin floating scarves normally depicted with Japanese deities, gods, and celestial beings (and also, sometimes demons and youkai in animanga and games).
I HC he wears them around his arms. We'll see if I add them or not here 👍
I'm planning to redraw the horn shapes and make them more detailed and slightly more twisted looking... ✍️
I'd make him take more inspo from his Design Poll outfit and Azami's clothes.
He's an ancient being, so I'd rather him wear traditional clothes instead.
I'd make him have a white floating scarf around his arms. I'll probably play around with the outfit design
In my redesign, I'd give him a Pibo (hanfu shawl) inspired scarf to wear around his arms.
I like the shape language of Áo tứ thân (lit. "four piece/part dress")
I feel like I'd draw him in this Áo tứ thân but in black and red instead.
So he'd mainly be wearing a black cross collared top with red accents ❌
I'd have him wear black pants, white sashes tied around the waist and over his arms, and have the black front panel be dyed with a red gradient at the bottom.
And his usual form can wear a Áo dài (lit. "long dress") in black and yellow colours.
Art Rambles ✍️
I drew the initial sketch in April 2025, then redrew the expressions to the current version in July 2025. Recently filled in the colours for it 👍
The only reason why I didn't have his red sclera with black pupils was cuz it'd lose readability, especially with my style of drawing eyes.
I don't draw very big eyes in my style, so I just made his eyes red.
I'll adjust the shadows and coloured lines effect later! And ofc I'll also clip the airbrush layers to the colours, and paint over stuff too.
These are WIPs for now, so I'll post updated versions whenever I get the time.
Tried to colour with a different lighting method recently! I also tested a bunch of different gradient maps 💗
I love the glowy lines effect with either Colour Burn or Multiply 🤗
I used Gray Multiply layer and Overlay layer with airbrushed saturated colours. This method is so OP for doing dramatic lighting 🤯💥
At first, I wasn't sure how it'd look, but it starts coming together when you start adding more saturated colours.
I prefer this over the initial version I did. The colours look SO pleasing 🥰
It's so easy and quick to do. Gonna colour like this from now on 👍
Also, I'm not sure how this looks on other screens. My monitor lightens the colours considerably compared to my laptop and phone, so I brightened the art a bit with Adjustment Layers (Level Correction and Tone Curve)
Art Plans
I'm waiting for when I get more free time to adjust some things :>
I'll refine and redraw some stuff (redraw Saeru's horns, Ene's hair and headphones, adjust the light) 🫰
And I'll combine the coloured lines effect to have both Colour Burn's saturated glowy effect on the outer lines and Multiply's softer effect on the lines 🙏
Ngl I was debating whether to make his sleeves that huge that big tbh cuz it hides Ene almost entirely but I love how the clothing folds look… 💗
Gotta say I do love the way his sleeves lovingly drape over Ene. 🤭💞
Perhaps she could be clutching onto his sleeves…
I'm pretty obsessed with "Chara's long hair or sleeves lovingly drapes over their lover like a wedding veil" in compositions. 💞
I've been saving this art for when I have time. I wanted to decide on the sketch first. I usually redraw hair, face, eyes, clothes, etc., multiple times and then decide on the best one 👍
Quote
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I wrote these poems from the POVs of Saeru and Ene respectively. 🖤 💙
KuroEne poems, with implied HaruTaka 🖤💙💚🧡
The first two poems are my absolute fave ones 🥰💗 I love the prose... ☺️
I started getting into writing poems recently! I wrote these a couple days ago...
I'm waiting for the chance to pair them with my art. 🎨
Once I do, I'll post my KuroEne poetry collection on my socials and AO3 eventually. ☺️
I'm working on KuroEne fluff and mild angst drabble fics on the side, so I'll eventually post them there ✌️
I also explained the References to the poems below! 📝
I was inspired by KuroEne's Vibes: Gothic Ballroom Dance / Fall to Hell with me / Devil's Temptation 😈😇🪽
KuroEne gives me the vibes of "One Last Dance" and "Once more, just to see you" 🥺🙏
KuroEne and HaruTaka will have 1 million One Last Times... 🥺
Especially since Saeru can continue to see his beloved one as long as the time loops continue.
Poem 1: References 📖✨
My beloved
1: Saeru's pet name used for Ene.
(*) = In my KuroEne AU, Saeru calls Ene "My dear little bunny" (俺の親愛なるウサギちゃん, Ore no shin'ai naru Usagi-chan) as an affectionate pet name.
Because Ene has twintails that look like bunny ears 🐇
But his chosen nickname is definitely on purpose on his part, because bunnies are the prey of snakes, and mankind is his hunting ground.
So, it still ends up playing up to his ego.
I came up with it for my KuroEne AU, to show off his "smug and arrogant, obsessive" character traits. ☺️
Come dance with me
2: A ref to Ene.
Saeru refers to their trysts as "dances" to play up to Ene's "dancer" and "gamer" theme, and invites her to come play with him.
(*) = Takane's full online gamer name was “Lightning Dancer Ene” or “Dancing Flash Ene” (閃光の舞姫・エネ, Senkou no Maihime - Ene), where Maihime (舞姫) means “Dancer girl” or “Dancing princess”
On a tower of corpses
3: It's a reference to Sidu's metaphorical imagery in Outer Science. 🖤🐍
In Mekakucity V's Outer Science Q/A interview, Sidu states that, what looks like a pile of rubble, is Saeru standing on top of the bodies of the Mekakushi Dan from hundreds and thousands of Routes (past timelines) 🩸
Let us act as Beasts do
and imitate how humans love.
4 ~ 5: These lines are based on Kuroha/Saeru Dialogue that I originally wrote for my KuroEne AU. He says it to Ene when he starts to reveal more of his true nature (darker tendencies)
Saeru: Beasts should act as beasts do... No need for pretenses.
Saeru, a being distanced from humanity, has a twisted love (obsession), and truly doesn't understand love. But this obsession and devotion, is the closest he can muster to it.
Poem 2: References 📖✨
and carves its shape into my soul,
with Death's scythe.
9 ~ 10:
Fujimori, the artist for KagePro chibi (SD) merch, depicts Joker card Saeru as a Jester with a Scythe, and a Jester hat, to play up to the Joker card motif. 🃏 🩸
I interpreted Saeru here as a Grim Reaper or Shinigami (死神, lit. "Kami (God) of Death"), with a Death Scythe.
Poem 5: References 🐍🐑
You pitiful little sheeps
1:
This poem is the only Saeru poem of this set, that is directed towards the Mekakushi Dan and humanity in general.
In LN 7, Kuroha/Saeru refers to the Mekakushi Dan as "pitiful little sheeps" (哀れな仔羊たち, aware na kohitsuji-tachi)
Because they're like small animals (easy targets) for him.
You can read the rest of the rambles under the cut! 🌟
Misc Rambles ✨
I was testing writing poems around 1 - 4 lines. 📝✍️
The first couple are from Saeru's POV, and then the next ones are from Ene's POV.
A few ones are HaruTaka implied.
I really love both! 💗
The imagery of the 2nd poem is really nice... I really love how the 2nd poem's 1st verse describes Saeru as shadow, night, and both the Black Sun and the Moon. 🖤✨
I drafted them a couple days ago, and then adjusted the grammar, punctuation, and word flow. ✌️
I'm rather picky about wording, so I'm just gonna post my writing WIPs here.
The first two are finalized! 💖✨
I'm gonna adjust the others :3 I'll work on adding to the rest soon~
I just wanted to show my writing WIPs here. Hehe
Writing in free-verse is the most freeing for me. ✍️
I kinda don't like how Ellipsus doesn't space headings the same height as lines, but oh well. ✍️
I also found out some people post poems on AO3!! Ig it will be the first writing thing I post on AO3, cuz my first exposure to reading/writing again was reading poems. 😌
Poems Inspiration 💖✨
I was inspired by UH's Character Poems! 💚🧡🦇🌸
They really tie to each other perfectly in thematics.
Iirc, it's confirmed their Vol. 27 and Vol. 40 poems are tied to each other. ☺️
I think it's a wonderful idea and this visual format is really cool...
I was inspired by Bleach's Character Poems at the start of each volume for the cover character! 📖
So I was inspired by UH's poems, Bleach's Poems in general, and Hyakunin Isshu poems :3 💖
(I added Alt Text just so it doesn't clog their ship tag's search results.)
KuroEne Poems: Art Plans 🖤💙
I love the idea of characters having Character Poems about their thoughts and feelings. 🥺
I'm planning to match the format and just suit it to my art style when I get to draw it visually :3
I'll post my KuroEne poems on AO3 when I get the chance to pair it with my art 💗 🫶
For KuroEne, I'm planning to draw their eyes… And then I'll format the text with the poem title.
I think the text formatting will take the longest, over me doing the art itself lol
I was also inspired by the Hyakunin Isshu poems. You can find English Translations by 100poets. The prose is very lovely... Some of my top fave poems ever 💗
【KagePro】 KuroEne Bridal Carry Commission by Pochi 🖤💙🐍🐇
Intro
Kuroha (Saeru) and Ene (Takane) Half Body Commission by Pochi (@/pochikocchi)
Pochi's VGen Showcase: (X)
I commissioned Pochi to draw KuroEne with Saeru bridal carrying Ene 🖤💙🐍🐇💐
I requested for them to be drawn in their Design Poll and Seek at Mekakucity outfits 💖
I also requested them to give Saeru a smug flirty smirk with fangs showing, and to make him buff with black painted nails, and for Ene to have a flustered blush with her hands near her face ☺️
Pochi also included a little chibi freebie doodle, which is very sweet of them 💗
I love chibi Ene's shy flustered expression and Saeru's smug mischievous look... My little skrunklies 🥺🖤💙
Thoughts
I'm super happy to get the chance to commission them to draw my beloveds 🖤💙
The final piece is utterly breathtaking 😭💘 Everything about it is so perfect!! 🥹💞🙏
The composition, poses, expressions, colours, rendering, and lighting are all super gorgeous!! It captures their vibes so perfectly, I'm in awe!! 💓
I made it into my wallpaper so I can stare at it ☺️
I sent a tip to show my appreciation 🙏
Thank you to Feila for helping me come up with comp, pose, and expression ideas 💖
The rest of my rambles are under the cut ✨
Misc Rambles
I jumped when I saw this 😭
My wife and her crazy bf look so perfect 😘💞
(Zooms full speed at the way they drew Ene's thighs and Saeru's changshan tiddy window) 🫶
Black painted nails fits Saeru so well. They portrayed my vision so perfectly~ ✨
I'm happy beyond words to receive such a stunning piece of my beloved OTP in my fave outfits of theirs 💗🫶
Pochi has SUCH great colour sense!! 💝
I'd love to get the chance to commission them to draw KuroEne and my Ene multiships as well as other OTPs in the future 💞🙏
VGen Review
The art turned out so beautiful OMG 😭🥹💘❣️ I’m super happy! They look absolutely stunning! 🖤💙
The piece outdid my expectations, I was utterly blown away by how gorgeous the artwork is! 💖 They incorporated all of my requests and captured their poses, expressions, and vibes so perfectly! 💗🫶
The composition, colours, and lighting are SO amazing! 😭💘🫶 Truly went above and beyond to deliver such an amazing piece ✨
Very kind and easy to work with, receptive to feedback and great communication 💖 Will definitely be back to commission again in the future! ☺️💞
My Message
This was the message I left for Pochi! 💖🌟✨
Thank you so much again for the lovely commission! 💗💗
Kuroha (Saeru) and Ene look SO beautiful in your style 🖤💙
I love everything about the colours, rendering, lighting, poses, and expressions. 😭💘🫶
The piece is beautifully composed! Their expressions are so perfect, I love how you drew Kuroha’s smug flirty expression and Ene’s flustered blush. 💗💞
You incorporated all of my requests and perfectly captured what I envisioned (compositions, poses, expressions, vibes, buff Kuroha with black painted nails) ☺️💖🙏
I love it so much 😭💞 I'm super happy with how it turned out!! 🫶
The art turned out absolutely stunning 🤗🫶 They look so dreamy with the glowy lighting 🥺‼️❣️
OMG the usage of colour (saturated and muted tones) and textures are so good. The colours harmonize so well! ❣️
The glowy lighting, sky, clouds, sparkles and water splash textures in the BG fits them so well ✨
I was also pleasantly surprised the characters were recognized. ☺️
My beloveds look absolutely amazing in your style! 😭🥺🖤💙💞
Kuroha: “Wishes are fodder (for me), and humans are my seedbed.” (*)
Notes:
Alt 1: “Wishes are bait, and mankind is my seedbed.”
Alt 2: “What I wish for is prey, and mankind is my seedbeed.”
Official Translation by Yen Press
Kuroha: What I seek is prey…
…And mankind is my hunting ground. (*)
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クロハ:願いは「餌」だ
クロハ:人間どもは「苗床」だ
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(Kuroha: Negai wa “esa” da.)
(Kuroha: Ningen domo wa “naedoko” da.)
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Notes:
Dialogue from Kagerou Daze Manga: Ch. 62 - NO TITLE
餌 (Esa, “Animal feed; fodder; pet food; bait; lure; enticement”)
苗床 (Naedoko, “Seedbed; seed plot; nursery”)
Notion Version
Copied my rambles over from my Notion Docs for those that prefer the picture version with line breaks and highlights.
Rambles
Kagerou Daze: Ch. 62 - NO TITLE - Saeru speaks with Konoha
“What I wish for is prey, and mankind is my seedbed.” (Literal Translation)
“What I seek is prey… And mankind is my hunting ground.” (Official English Translation by Yen Press)
Wanted to ramble a bit.
I think the JP wording is so interesting.
The original line has such interesting wording…
I LOVE Yen Press’ prose and how they translated this line.
I posted my literal TL above.
Oh, the JP wording is interesting... I also learned a new word with this.
Yen Press translated his dialogue SO well. This line is SOOO good. I love it so much!!! 🖤 💛 🐍
“Wishes are bait/fodder” → More literal TL of the JP text.
“What I wish for is prey” → More liberal TL by Yen Press.
I definitely understand how Yen Press got that, with Saeru basically saying, “What I wish for is bait/fodder” -> "What I seek is prey..."
Especially since “bait” is used to lure in and entice prey.
The way Yen Press translated his dialogue here is so good. It perfectly plays up to Saeru Hebi being the predator animal (“hunter”) and the Mekakushi Dan (“Eyes”) being his prey (targets)
He’s the instigator of the time loop tragedy, and the “orchestrator” and “winner” of this game.
Reminds me of a puppet master who controls the strings.
The evil, cruel, powerful snake, and these weak little humans!!! (At least in his eyes)
Notes
Word:
餌 (Esa, "Bait”)
餌 (Esa) refers to food you give to an animal. It could refer to bait to lure prey (ex. when fishing), or animal feed (ex. when feeding your pets)
Word:
苗床 (naedoko, "seedbed; nursery; seed-plot")
Consists of:
苗 (nae, "seedling; sapling; young plant")
床 (toko, "bed; bedding; floor")
Misc Rambles
I think what's also interesting is that the JP version uses the same wording (repetition) of “Desire” (*) to emphasize the “Desire” that underlies Saeru's origins and motives (to fulfill his Master’s desire, since Azami’s original desire is what’s sustaining him)
Note: 願い (negai, “desire; wish; hope”)
As a language, English is harsh on repetition unlike Japanese, and needs to avoid sounding too stiff.
Though I do think Yen Press keeps it pretty intact with the use of “Desire”
With the original JP version, his wording does evoke the imagery of a “human seedbed” 🌱
It also reminds me that Saeru has referred to the Mekakushi Dan as “pitiful little sheeps” (哀れな子羊たち, aware na kohitsuji-tachi) 🐏🐑
For me, it evokes the imagery of the poor little sheeps falling prey to the big bad snake... 🐍
A seedbed is a bed where seeds are grown (where seedlings are planted) 🌱
The place (world made by Azami) where “seeds” (humans) are “planted” (birthed)
Huh...
I bet he’d have such a fascinating viewpoint of the world.
After all, Saeru Hebi is the embodiment of Azami’s knowledge/wisdom. 🤭
Also my internet has been SO ass lately, like it keeps randomly disconnecting 😭
Shitpost Rambles
I originally wrote these as tags but tbh I think I should add these rambles to the post itself.
Also with how Saeru calls Konoha 兄弟 (kyoudai, “brother; sibling; mate; friend”) and 同胞 (douhou, “brethren; brothers”)
Since they come from the same creator (Azami)
It's so funny to think of this whole situation as Clearing and Awakening's Beef. Family feud /lh
Comedy Show Start-Up: The Snake Siblings are fighting!!! 💥💥💥
Saeru is like the eldest sibling no one likes /lh
It's so funny (angsty) when you bring the 9/6 multiships into this with Ene and KuroEne and KonoEne.
Mr. Steal Yo Girl and Mr. Steal Yo Life (Body) 🖤💛💙🐍🐇
Feila was like “The brother that wants everything that you have and ended up taking it all for himself…”
Ene look away from this mess /lh
Guy who stole your late love/lover's body.
This situation must be so surreal 😭
Don't take this seriously, this is more shitposty
Yen Press Rambles
I also noticed that EN localizers tend to lighten the scan colours a bit (dark gray vs. pure black) in their scans.
I wonder if it's intentional irt printing EN volumes (or if it's cheaper to print them that way?)
I far prefer Yen Press over the other major English manga localizers (Viz, Kodansha)
I LOVE Yen Press' prose and translation style.
Yen Press’ TLs are always more liberal compared to fan-TLs. Their translators typically have such a good understanding of context.
There are some minor errors with the Eye Ability names being translated inconsistently, but I’ll forgive it since it’s honestly inevitable in a 200 page volume.
Thank god that they were the ones who translated the Kagerou Daze manga.
Yen Press's official EN TLs have always been good for the most part (aside from the minor TL errors for the Eye Abilities and etc., but I can't really blame them since it's inevitable in a 200 page volume)
100000000% prefer them over Kodansha and especially Viz LMFAO
Yen Press as an EN manga localizer has really good prose.
Yen Press rules.
I trust that Viz has skilled translators, but Viz tends to make weird translation choices sometimes. Maybe this issue is on Viz's publishers or editors?
At the very least, Magi's official EN TL is decent. Thank god.
Though, I wish Yen Press translated Magi tbh.
It’s usually Viz that tends to get the rights to shounen series (and some shoujos)
I just vastly prefer Yen Press' approach to translation and their TL quality.
I really like Yen Press’ translations.
Though I’d say that the ONE thing that Viz and Kodansha TLs have going for them over Yen Press is that they release scans in super HD (or at least make it more easy for manga raw providers to rip them), so their scans are much more higher quality and more convenient to use as art refs.
Viz and Kodansha's official mangas tend to be sized at about the 1500 x 2500 px range.
It depends on the series.
Yen Press releases their E-books at a smaller resolution size.
Kagerou Daze's official English version scans by Yen Press are about 900 x 1350 px.
I know Yen Press translated the KagePro manga volumes and LNs.
And frankly, thank god.
YP has minor TL errors with inconsistently translating the names of the Eye Abilities at times, but that’s more minor tbh. I really like their translation style in general.
And how Yen Press tends to include info pages explaining honorifics and key terms.
Idrc for Yen Press’ lack of redrawn SFX tbh, so I'm completely fine with Kodansha and Yen Press just putting the translation for what the SFX means in EN text, either next to, or under the original JP SFX.
I did confirm that the Kagerou Daze Manga’s Official English Translation by Yen Press has scans that are 900 x 1350 px.
They are not as HD as the ones I ripped directly from the JP raws. The Kagerou Daze manga's JP scans are 1441 x 2048 px.
But it'll do for now.
Yen Press also tends to release official EN TLs really quickly for the series they work on. Yen Press is honestly a blessing
Yen Press is one of the only major EN localizers (at least that I know of) where their TLs are either the same quality as, or even better than fan translations, and much more accurate too.
Yen Press' TL and wording/prose are REALLY GOOD. I also love their translator notes.
It helped me figure out things since they added to the context of some lines.
Their translators are REALLY skilled and have such a good understanding of context.
Their translators make more liberal TLs, but are still in line with the OG text for the most part.
Their TL helped me understand the context much better than fan-TLs too, since they add to the context of some lines with their own interpretations