Premise: List the first lines of your last 20 or so stories. See if there are any patterns. Choose your favorite opening line. Then tag 10 authors!
Thank you lovely @tc-doherty and @forthesanityofstorytellers for the tag! Tbh itās kinda tradition/pattern to get loads of tags from you Sanity at the end of the year and Iām obsessed with that fact haha. š¤ Also, I don't have 20 WIPs, but I had 17, which is crazy lol. It was def unexptected.
There are definitely some pattern here, also. Namely:
i like to start with death, blood or simply someone feeling terrified
i like to start with namedropping
i like to start with something punchy
i like to start with more introsprection rather than action
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I'm really curious in particular for your answer to this ask since Lonel and IQRUS share a world of what I understand which makes this very interesting...
If you were to write a story in your setting, which would occur at a point in time other than the current time for any of the particular WIPs (or a point in time already covered but within an entirely different region and focusing on entirely separate events), what would it look like? Why would this time/place be interesting to write? If happening before the WIPs current time, would it tell of history known to the current time? If told after, would the events of the current WIP be known history to the characters? Would any characters/objects carry through time?
Hope you enjoy!
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Love you for this itās such a fun question, thank you!
Funny thing, I have actually three story planned in the world of IQRUS.
One before Lonel (so far itās called Sasin but it will change in the future), then Lonel and lastly IQRUS. Sasin will be a story about mafia clans having magical abilities and separated by those, plus a detective who will be deeply connected to them. There, the detective will get a little knowledge about zaphrins in the end of their storyline and stuff in Auris, so they will appear in Lonel later. Because those two are taking place in different countries but slowly get connected by the strange phenomenons like constant raining (which wouldnt be as weird in Auris, Lonelās country but it is in where Sasin takes place), and the water acting up or not usual. Sasin will have more knowledge of the, lets call it āintergalacticalā picture and they want to spread it or get help, assemble force, idk yet. Meanwhile somewhere around where the main Astin Tower will be built, Icharo (IQRUSā villain) does his thing to flood the planet. Thatās what the other countries experience as weird little changes.
However, Lonel and Sasinās story isnāt widely known to the history of IQRUS, because they are pretty secretive things. But, Adran and the Deep Corps memebers all find many little relics and stuff from the places those stories took place in. That was my first little motivation at the beginning to be honest. To have some Easter Eggs in IQRUS from other stories, like paintings with Selys' name on it that the Deep Corps found in the sunken cities or something like that.
Also, I think what Icharo begins, will mute every supernatural aspect other than his eldritch horrors. So, whatever was with Lonel and Sasin, those powers will be blocked or surpressed almost completely. Weāll see. Because IQRUS revolves around techonolgy that is so advanced it feels like magic. But there is no true magic to where Dane and Adran lives. On another Towers tho⦠who knows. They might meet Selys at some point.
Thank you so much for the numbers! š Well, it was a lovely combination of two IQRUS song, Goodbye by Ramyes (from Arcane) and Doom by Imagine Music. So, since I already planned to write this scene in the near future, I've lived with the opportunity now.
Context: The cult experimented on making a specimen of the mix of a human and a zaphrin (angel/lesser god-like creatures) that can erase other zaphrins. Adran happened to be the best candidate to this role, so they made him insane and turned him into an eldritch monster, then went to the Everocean to destroy Auva and kill Dane. It's almost the end of the book.
Adranās jaw ā that nauseating, deformed piece of his face where his sharp, shark-like teeth slumbered ā clenched together with an ear-shatteringĀ crunch.Ā His Evolved hand closed over Daneās neck with ease. It seemed so tiny compared to his clawed arms that Dane tried to draw blood from with his weak fingers. To no avail, however. The scales that grew over Adranās translucent, slithery skin could stop lasers from slicing them through. A mere scratch of a human being was not near to harming him.
Adranās neck twitched as he saw his brotherās tears escaping from the side of his face.
āAdā¦ranā¦ā he forced out the letters with the air that rushed out from his lungs but couldnāt get back anymore. His face slowly turned into the purple of the sunset behind him. āFight⦠itā¦ā
ÉŖį“ ÉŖs į“ÉŖį“į“, ÉŖÉ“sį“į“į“.
He watched Dane struggle, desperation and terror pooling into his ocean-blue eyes.Ā No. Źį“s.Ā His brother let out a gutwrenching cry as Adranās claws tightened, his neck bruising visibly.Ā No! NO!
Electric shockwaves ran down across his skin, right into his bones, the little sparkles popping up here and there in the ooze that dripped from his whole body. His mind had been out of his reach, thick fog and froth washing Adran farther away from himself. Numbness sunken him deeper and deeper locking him into a dark corner of his existence. Heād seen his grotesque, eight feet tall self lifting Dane higher through an old screen, not his eyes. He was lost. He was doing what was best.
It was the best for Her. And so it could be the best for the world as well.
Adran saw what he was doing. Through a screen. Through⦠he saw his arms and a scar on the sensitive skin between two lines of scales.
A scar.
É“į“É“sį“É“sÉŖį“į“Ź.
His scar.
į“sɪɓɪɓį“.
The scar he got when he saved Dane. From falling. From dying. He stirred in his numbness. Adran looked down at Daneās remnant of his mechanic leg. He ripped it out of their fitting. He trashed in the shadows of his mind, trashed for air and freedom.
He was choking Dane. The one he saved and has scarred himself for. Dane lost his leg that day, the day he got his scar. When they were kids. He saved him. From falling. From dying. His Dane.
Adran looked at his gagging, deepening red face.
At hisĀ little brother.
NO!
Adranās mind buzzed and whirled, itĀ meltedĀ andĀ bledĀ as he screamed his throat raw when he finally forcefully took the control back over his body. He immediately let Dane go, then with his eyes jumping everywhere at an insane speed, he turned around to look at the source of this bone-crushing unease, thisĀ madness.
At Icharo Astin, The Golden Prophet.
He couldnāt describe the guttural loathing that his form presented under the golden robe, and he didnāt try to. With the thin thread he could grab of his sanity, Adran charged towards The Golden. The vesselās floorĀ thumpedĀ under his large, oily feet, the air around him resonating and tearing apart. The Golden did not move as if he was sculpted from stone-cold confidence. He stood there as the grand statue of lunatics. He was indestructible. Death couldnāt lay a hand on him.
Adran, however, was worse than death.
And so he broke through the invisible, yet crushing resistance that this manās,Ā this monsterāsĀ cosmic protection had lifted before him. There was a slight hint of surprise in The Goldenās unreadable, faceless expression when Adran soundlesslyĀ roaredĀ at him and began to rip him out of existence. He surprised a God, after all.Ā į“ į“sį“Źį“į“į“ÉŖį“É“. Źį“į“'Źį“ É¢į“ɓɓᓠᓠį“sį“Źį“Ź. Źį“į“Źsį“Źź°. Adran felt an endless shock of pain in his core, in his bones, in his mind. He started bleeding from everywhere as he sucked the skin, the bone, theĀ lifeĀ out of The Golden before him.
What he was consuming, was a part of him already. And he couldnāt bear it. It was too much for his body.
Jarring gurgling exploded from The Goldenās mouth. Deafening agony resonated in the air, as both he and Adran shrieked.
Vibrant red and sparkling gold blood bled onto the floor, pooling under them.
Yet, Adran had only one thing stuck in his mind. One thing he was holding onto; that last thread of sanity. Golden-red blood oozed from his face as tears, when he looked at the terrified Dane from the corner of his eyes.
āSave them,ā he⦠forced his mouth to form the words.
Then, with the thought of his little brother, Adran howled in sync with The Golden one last time, before he tore every part of him out of the worlds and destroyed himself in the process.
What are some specific words, metaphors, or phrases that you like to use to bring the reader into the headspace of a certain character?
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This is an interesting one.
For characters from IQRUS for example, I tend to use a lot of metaphors and phrases connected to drowning and the water. Itās evident because water has a big part in that setting. But, I use differently for every character, because in Adranās povs for example, it is something he used to and okay with it. In Daneās povs, though, will always come up in his angsty times, usually when heās panicing, he feels like drowning and stuff, because he has very bad memories with it. Dane also never uses curses and phrases that refer to the Almighty or any religious things, so he curses like ādepth and darknessā or something that rather refers to their natural phenomenons.
Thank you for the tag @aninkwellofnectar, @bloodlessheirbyjacques and @the-void-writes! I do not have a title for Project Metalsea, not a single one, even for the first book lmao. So we'll work with what we have. <3
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Now, hereās the IQRUS cast, where Dane also got two different portraits. But we start with the others. (link for the picrew)
Auva Knox and Eran Kodyn
Adran Cohren and Thaddeus Holtz (made in a different picrew)
pre-Council member Dane Cohren, Council member Dane Cohren
I was worried that Auva and Dane would look like siblings, but, to be fair, everyone looks like this in the Caelus Sector, so.
Anyway, since I still can upload photos, hereās a chibi couple pic of Council member Dane and Auva.
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@aschlindartroom here's another one from the lovely prompts! Even though it's not really going between frenemies or anything like that, becaues the character I could imagine the line is just straight out good friends with the other. But still. Fair warning: this one got veeery long lmao.
Also huge thanks to my love @bloodlessheirbyjacques for beta reading for me! ā¤ļø
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YOU BROUGHT ME ALONG BECAUSE I CAN DO THINGS YOU CAN'T HANDLE. SO JUST LET ME DO MY PART THEN, YEAH? | ADRAN COHREN | THADDEUS HOLTZ | EERIE UNDERWATER MISSION | WC: 2,475
Adranās Deep Sight suddenly shut off, leaving him with nothing, but his own eyes to navigate in the Everoceanās endless depths.
āThad, the⦠ā
āYes, I know. No Sight, no Vision. Even Zynx doesnāt answer, something might be blocking her signals.ā Thaddeus needed to be close, because Adran could slightly feel the swaying of the water through his suit. āI donāt like the look of this, Captain.ā
Adran couldnāt help but agree with his comradeās crackling voice through the microphone. Somehow, even the sounds got confused, making the otherās voice feel distant and machine-like. Theyāve met nymars that could perplex their devices for a little while, but the one theyāve escaped from wasnāt that kind. Which meant the only thing that could mess with them was their objective ā that lonely, lightless cave thatās circular, yawning entrance reminded Adran of a black hole that Dane showed him in a picture a long time ago.
āMe neither, but thatās why weāre here. It turned into a Blind Mission then, thatās all. If we stick together we should be fine, as always,ā he said, while his hand found his pendant under his suit. He needed to trust the Almightyās guidance on this mission. They were no more than any man this time.
Buzzing and whirring made Adran grimace; he could best interpret the noise as a scoff, before a big hand grabbed his forearm. The faint light of their swimming suits shone bright enough to reveal Thaddeusā slowly wrinkling face.
Their closeness made the sounds even worse for both of them.
That meant one thing.
āCommunication off.ā The words rolled off of Adranās tongue heavily. All the connection broke in a blink of an eye, making place for that sightless, deafening silence the soldiers were trained for in the practice chamber. Sunken in a weighting liquid, trapped in a too open space. Feeling, hearing and seeing nothing, but their own projection of things theyāve expected to find.
There was no practice chamber, however. The threat was real around them somewhere, which if they wouldnāt want to bring upon themselves, they couldnāt use any more light then the suitsā.
Thaddeus slowly blinked, signaling his agreement on Adranās decision, then looked at the direction in the dark where theyāve seen the caveās entrance the last time. It was unmistakable; a restless, unsettling pull emitted from it which might have felt insignificant if they would just swim by it.
But not this close, not this time.
Adran knew Thaddeus felt it too, he needed to. There was nothing like that feeling. And that was why he needed to know whatās inside that cave. Everything heād done so far, those terrible things he was suspected with ā all of it led to this place.
After setting a rope on his and his comradeās belt, they began to swim towards the objective.
Without the sight of any rock, seaplant or sea life, Adranās focus never wandered, so he could notice the difference when they finally were inside. The sensation of the pull became stronger, while the darkness somehow turned even darker. He experienced a completely blind state before, but not this thick, oily blackness that not only surrounded them; it swallowed them whole.
Guide me. He saw the cave outside, it was deep, but straight. There was no other sign, only that and only there. He needed to go forward, no matter what.
As much as the strange feeling felt as a pulling, Adran never met water this heavy, this⦠resistant. It almost seemed as if they tried to swim against a current.
Forward.
His helmetās weak inner glow let him see his reflection on the translucent part of his gear. The face he saw had deep wrinkles on the forehead, lips forcefully pressed together, eyes desperately trying to find something to look at. He couldnāt see the ears, but he could feel and hear the pumping of the blood in his eardrums. That look on the reflected face and the sound of his own throbbing blood flow reminded Adran of someone who was afraid.
He almost stopped from the realization. He couldnāt remember the last time he felt fright in the water. No, of course not. This was his job, his domain. He knew the Everocean as someone knew his own home. He's been on Blind Missions a million times now, and however unusual this sensation felt, there was nothing he couldnāt handle. He needed to remember his training.
If you canāt see, you listen.
And so he listened. The murmurs of his and Thaddeusā gear almost sounded calming despite their distant echoing. Echoing. There was no such thing like that underwater.
Shiver ran through Adranās spine when the temperature dropped. There was no transition, one second to another, he just found himself inside an ice cold darkness with no room for the heating layer of his suit. A thousand ants scuttled around on his skin, their hurried steps hurting more and more as the cold bit into every inch of his body. Then, it was as if something had brushed past his arm.
Adran tried to turn on his Frost-Vision by squeezing his eyes, while his hand automatically pushed the water farther from himself.
He did not get back his sight, nor he encountered anything in the water. Nothing attacked him.
But he couldnāt be sure.
Adran panted in his helmet, blood loudly drumming in his ear, while the cold tried to trick his mind again. Or something was brushing past his body every second.
He needed to remember his training. He's done similar things hundreds of times now. He couldnāt fail now.
Adran pulled on his rope twice, not slowing, nor stopping to let his helmet clear from his breath. The rope almost immediately moved twice again with a little force to pull him backwards.
Thaddeus was still here and okay.
The captain closed his eyes, as he always did in the chamber too. He needed to feel. He felt the brushing on every part of his body, an attempt to scare him, make him change direction. He felt it. It wanted to⦠guide him.
All the constant crawling on his skin wanted him to let his resistance go. This thought made Adran very aware of the pendant pushing into his chest. He squeezed his eyes even more together, holding onto the holy symbol, and then, he let everything go.
Guide me.
The sensation embedded into the strange pulling. They made Adran feel dizzy, his stomach hurled back into the pit of his core and twisted so tight, he could sense bile rising up in his throat. It lasted for seconds or minutes, he couldnāt tell. Ghostly pulling sensation swayed him left, then right, to every direction it wanted to. His throat began to dry out from the freezing cold, he was gagging, choking as if every air would have left the suit.
Then, the coolness started to melt away with a faint, dim light that hit his closed eyes.
He did not open them, so long as he finally felt the pull release his bones, scamper out from under his skin and let him reach the surface.
Adran emerged from the water so quickly, he almost fully leaped out from it. His eyes shot open as his helmet pulled back into his suit, and he hurriedly gulped down air like heās tasting it for the first time in his life. He did not look around so long he could hear the throbbing in his ears and feel the bits on his skin.
A short time later the rope loosened on his belt and Thaddeus arose from the water beside him.
He reacted the same way, jumping out as if something was chasing him. So he felt it too.
Adran couldnāt deny the relief of not being the only one, while he scrambled towards his comrade, grabbed him by the neck of the suit and with a powerful yank, he helped him get out of the water before he followed him.The movement came to him instinctively, not caring what they crawled up onto.
Both of them breathed heavily, laying on the ground, trying to collect themselves.
Thaddeus looked up at Adran, leaning on his hand beside him.
āThis is no simple Blind Mission, Cap. That path was worse than those grosslingsā inside. Are you sure you want to proceed?ā His face seemed to be made from shadows under the strange, blue-orange light that lit the space. Adran gave this a little thought, but he already knew his answer. He nodded eventually. āFine. Donāt waste any more time then.ā
Thaddeus was clearly deeply concerned, which Adran understood completely. He had a lot to lose if something turned out to be dangerous. He, unfortunately, was also the only one who the Captain could fully trust to make this mission through with him. Adran debated a lot to include him, but he also knew if Thaddeus wouldnāt be here, then he could never find out the truth about all the confusing things recently ā and about himself as well.
They both gave themselves an extra moment, before they got up and took a good look at where they were exactly.
The place seemed to be a round cavern, water pooling inside where they came in. The waterās crystal blue texture let Adran see the glowing of some kind of organism close to the surface, which apparently also brightened the whole place. It stuck to the rock formations⦠or it was part of them. There was no way to tell.
It shone in a faint blue-orange colour and unfolded a tunnel before the soldierās eyes, as Adran realized little patches of the organism were trapped and attached to the walls in glass bulbs.
The walls also had a very unusual appearance. Adran thought what surrounded them was a stone he hadn't seen yet. But he soon realized, he saw no stone; not even close to any kind of rock.
What he faced was metal.
āWhat the hell is this place?ā Thaddeusā rumbling, deep voice echoed through the tunnel, while he frowned at the other side of the place, keeping a fair distance from it.
āI donāt know, but itās sure far from natural.ā
The two exchanged glances. Adran reached for his laser blade on his back, at the same time Thaddues grabbed a grip from his belt and let the massive Blastergun build up piece by piece, then fall into both of his hands.
Whatever layed far inside this place, better to be prepared.
The captain signaled with his free hand, what his comrade acknowledged with a nod before he began to creep forward. Adran mirrored him sticking close to his side of the wall, while he also brought up his arm to glance at the popped up holo screen. All the emergency bombs were intact on his suit, and the oxygen level in his tank barely dropped down. Which meant whatever he experienced in the water wasnāt caused by lack of air.
A familiar, sickening sensation pulled on his bones.
Adran jerked towards Thaddeus and he could see the big man tensing up everywhere. Something was wrong.
As they prowled inside carefully, this feeling only deepened. The cave ā or more like a hallway appeared to be endless and empty. Yet, the pulling made it feelā¦full. Full of⦠something.
Little rocks rubbed against their feet, quietly crackling underneath. Adran stepped on a small pile of them one time, causing a slightly louder noise, when movement coughed his eye on his right.
Hand gripping his blade, he glared at the metal wall beside him. It beared the colour of bronze and gold, but the blueness of the glowing organism hasn't shown on it. In fact, when Adran inched closer, it seemed as if the orange part of the brightness was coming from the wall. But, what dried his throat out was the surface of the metal⦠which was waving.
Like water.
Adran felt sick. His mind tickled as if a finger just tenderly would have caressed it. The longer he looked at the wall, the stronger the pulling in his bones grew. There was something deeply unnerving staring at it. The colour, the material, the structure. The hue. Sinister, black hues gathered around where the light hit the metal.
Wrong. This place felt nothing, but utterly wrong.
āCaptain.ā Adran spun on his heels, striking down on the one who called after him. Thaddeus immediately leaned back and grunted while he caught the captainās hand in mid-air, iron grip closing over the arm. There were mere inches between his face and the buzzing blade. āWhat are you doing?ā
If he hadnāt been a much bigger and equally trained soldier, Thaddeus would be only half a man already. The hardening concern on his features, the shock and warning in his voice snapped Adran out of his state. Confused, he stopped resisting and let his comrade forcefully bring his hand down from before his face.
āItās just⦠I donāt know. I got surprised by you. I was inspecting that wall andā¦ā
For the Almightyās holiest name, why did he do that? Was it instinct or a reflex because he called for him too suddenly? He couldnāt remember, nor could he feel anything else beside the shiver running back and forth on his spine and the wild rhythm of his heartbeat. Or that profound unease in his mind.
Whatever was the reason behind this, it just didnāt make sense. And it was dangerous.
Thaddeusā frown deepened, yet he let him go.
āRight. Look, itās okay, I believe you, but youāre clearly not well. I should probably carry the blade for you,ā before you start a rampage again. The words hung in the air like lethally sharp spikes over oneās head.
āThose werenāt me. Itās just this place⦠something is not right here. If we stumble upon anything dangerous with me being unarmedā¦ā
āThen Iāll pass the blade back to you, or deal with it myself. Itās not like you couldnāt fight without a weapon, either way, you brought me along because I can do things you canāt handle alone. So just let me do my part then, yeah?ā Thaddeus said, then extended his free hand.
For all the resistance in his body, Adran knew his comrade was right. He knew how his recent doings looked and even though Thaddeus believed him not killing innocents for no reason, caution was the best he could offer. Reason. It was hard to grasp for Adran what that word meant at the moment.
āHere.ā
He handed his weapon to Thaddeus anyway, who kept it safe on his back in the same way Adran would do it. Then, the big man put a massive hand on his shoulder, squeezed it reassuringly and nodded to their left with his head.
Happy WBW! Can you tell me a little bit more about each of the sectors in your IQRUS WIP? Do you have maps or like a general idea of the layout of each? What's a fun fact about each area?
Heyo! <3
I love talking about the Sectors, and I also got an ask about it the last time, so hereās a link to that. This time, I'll focus more on its aesthetics then, and give you some visuals. Even tho I don't have actual maps yet, I plan to make a 3D model of the Astin Tower in the future, but it's hell of a project, so I'm really preparing myself for it lol.
Enough talking now, here are the aesthetics from pinterest (none of this is my art ofc):
The Aquor Sector
Fun fact: If you happen to fell asleep on a landfill ā which is rather common because everyone wants to be the first one to get to the newly arrived batch of trash tech stuff in the morning ā, then you most likely will lose a well-functioning mechanical arm or leg or basically anything that can be detached from you. People will steal the good stuff even off of the living.
The Terrana Sector
Fun fact: There are places that you can find only if you're a Restored or if you've been invited there by one. That fact that you've found the place is basically your ticket to get in there. Also, some people think the caelusian are gods, so there's a church for them here.
The Caelus Sector
Fun fact: Some augmentations contain harmful tools hidden inside. It's a kind of open secret which people will discuss shadily during social gatherings. ;)