#gray's idea

Freddy Fazbear: *fainted intimidating hum, mocking the guard’s voice.*

Night Guard: *dropped his newspaper, stunning with vibrant eyes* What the hell?” 

Night Guard: *checked the laptop ahead of him, scanning every camera’s visual as if the final scan, he glimpsed a gloomy, velvet bear with pale eyes that chuckled wickedly with muffled tone* “Oh, fu---”

Storming Ox: *Watching both companions who both brawled at the flat platform, bent his arms together with a little grin.* “Their agility reflexes are unpredictable. I can defeat them all.” 

Soothsayer: “They will break your horns first. Have you noticed?” she peered her amber eyes at him. 

Once having a first draft after visioning the scene, what can you make the chapter's ending to let your reader flip the page to the next?

If suspension, what is there to surprise the reader? Any lovable/ evil characters to kill off? An old enemy's return? Mysteries to build questions?

(My example from the original story.)

"My back swiftly brushes into warmth presence from the girl's bold voice. My ears missed the melody of healing and nostalgic; lungs heavily whisper its cold I glance behind where the girl's voice summoned. My heart drowns before my eyes spill soft tears she stands ahead of the platform. Her long dress blesses to a twilight purple, and below sinks to jade. Black lashes. Thorn crown. Round eyes with burnt cinnamon, and greasy black hair.

"The girl, no longer a teenager, calls my nickname my family always named me. I know her face. My cousin's daughter.

"Daisy..." I sink my voice in underwater.